This is a Poem I wrote. For lovers of literature; you can check it out - or critique it.

UNANSWERED

by Felix Olowokere

Remember the days you were alone
The nights you had nobody to phone
Moments it felt you were deep inside a hole
Echoes in your ears, eyes stone cold
Heart racing, wallowing in sadness on your own
Scared to death, afraid of the unknown
The pills and needles made you feel numb
Made no difference, the pain lingered for so long
Dark days, dark nights - all alone
Hoping to see the light in your zone

Sometimes, I think; am I reaping what I sowed?
I don't think so though
I have done too much good to be in this hole
It's true, life is unfair afterall
But I did nothing to deserve all the pain
I feel the hormones crushing my bones
The whispers in my head leading me wrong
Crushing me non-stop
My dome now an abode for mephisto
I could go on and on

Having a tètè-a-tètè with the devil
Got me feeling brand new
Nothing really changed too
Now I'm are bedeviled by the evil I see them do
Nothing surprises me anymore
We're all fighting demons, or am I the only one?
Or could it be the pills that I'm on?
'Cause I can't seem to stop no more
Maybe tomorrow but tomorrow will never come
The gate of hell is cold - an irony many don't know

The poem is confusing to read. Is it written from a first person perspective? If so, then why is the first stanza written from a second person standpoint? The first stanza should be revised to reflect the first person view as reflected in the succeeding stanzas since that opening stanza is what sets the tone and gives clarity to the next set of presentations. The writer is imaginative, but confused when it comes to using insight as a presentation platform.

The poem also seems to end on a cliffhanger note. Is the person involved already dead or is he still trying to strike a deal with the devil. The last line seems to indicate that he died from his addictions, but this was not made very clear to the reader. Perhaps a stanza inserted before the last one would help clarify that matter.

@Holt
Thank you, Holt.

Yes, the writer knew it could be confusing because of the second person standpoint in which the first stanza was written. But that was meant to be an aside - maybe inverted commas should have been used?

The writer deliberately concludes in a confusing manner, leaving the poem open for readers to reach a conclusion that suits their imagination, which is why he titled it "Unanswered".

I will however, make the adjustment as you suggested, to ensure that the confusion is no more.

I think " unfair afterall" should be " unfair after all''. To be honest, your poem is easy to understand( just the first paragraph, the next paragraphs confused my mind a little bit because the writer seemed to change the poem aspect) and your sense of sentences is not enough to make the poem deeply or have a strong meaning to let the reader really feel your words. However, It is undeniable that you made my heart sad melancholy. Try to write more, hope I can read more of your poem in the future. (Sorry if you don't understand what I am saying cause I still practice English, and lol it's hard tbh).

It is actually easy to understand the first paragraph but then you changed the perspective which confused me a little bit. The language of your poem, I think, has not yet brought so much emotion to readers. However, it seems that you are really imaginative, keep going!