"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day" Pardoy

I have to parody a poem we studied in class. I tried to keep the same rhyming scheme. Please let me know what you think!

"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?": Shall I compare thee to a shoe?

Shall I compare thee to a shoe?
Thou art more restful and more essential:
Indigo waters do stain thee blue,
And the maker's mark all too influential.
Sometimes too valuable for the base,
And often is shape for function faulted;
And pair for pair finds no mace
By chance of nature's sidewalk vaulted;
But thy eternal obsession shall not wave
Nor lose possession of that pair thou ow'st,
Nor shall the closet hold thou in his grave
When in fashion thou will grow'st.
So long as women can breathe or walk,
So long live covetness in their talk.

HAHA!
So silly, i love it!
It's pretty awesome!

I don't know much about rhyming schemes and such but it sounds great the way I'm saying it.

(which is hopefully how your saying it)

Yep, quite awesome. Thanks for sharing it here, this is a real accomplishment.
And often is shape for function faulted--- I like this line a lot.

Nor lose possession of that pair thou own'st,--- should it be like this, with "own"???
Nor shall the closet hold thou in his grave
When in fashion thou will have grown'st. --- hahaha, i am not sure...
So long as women can breathe or walk,
So long live covetousness ?? in their talk.

The ending confused me...

I really enjoyed this!! I'm going to show it to people...

HAHAHA I'm so glad it made people laugh!

The orignal is ow'st and grow'st so I just left it the same. The ending is about how women want what someone else has, in this case shoes LOL

Thank you for your help!

This is such a great poem. I love how you changed Shakespeare poem into a contemporary poetry. Keep out the good work.