Hansen's disease - thesis statement works!

title of my research paper is Hansen's disease:Leprosy, a disease bought
by Mycobacterium leprae

would it be right if my thesis statement will be...

thesis statement:

among all the different kinds of bacterias mycobacterium leprae, an acid-fast rod and also an obligate intracellular organism gives birth to infectious disease known as leprosy.

Greetings!

Your thesis statement is quite a mouthful! :-) It might be better to simplify it just a little; you can explain in the following sentences that it is "an acid-fast rod and also an obligate intracellular organism." How about something like this: Among the many different kinds of bacteria, there is only one which brings the misery of the infectious disease known as leprosy: mycobacterium leprae.

Remember that "bacteria" is plural and "bacterium" is singular; more than one bacterium equals bacteria.

I'll look forward to reading more. :-)

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com