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"Do anything that you appreciate, do it elaborately" is my motto to lead me study science and art



Euuuna589 1 / 3  
Nov 30, 2016   #1
My poor self Introduction, Asking for correct sentence should be suitable

My interest about Korea starting when I was 13 years old. It's begin from publication of Korean culture through the medium of television (Drama, Music and Traditional food). At that time, culture from other country was new, uncommon and look so interesting because American and Japanese culture plays a huge role in South East Asia. Privately, I'm interested in music, food, study and work lifestyle overall.

In addition to classes, I do an activity such as sport competition but almost I take time with studying, free time take lesson review.

My word empowerment, "Do anything that you appreciate, do it elaborately" is my motto to lead me in both study in Science and Art in Master Degree and Bachelor Degree. That's cause why I can apply job in various types of work. Therefore I have more known about the goal of the organization, procedure, purpose and success measuring including many points of view in different social behavior in each workplace. Which one of work I am proud to participate too much named "PHPT" (Program for HIV Prevention and Treatment) has been collaborating with the Faculty of Associated Medical Science , Chiang Mai University and Institut de recherché pour le development : IRD, which was related to a lots of scientist group , technical specialist , public health policy maker , and Doctor, which focus on the development of effective antiretroviral therapy for HIV transmit prevention from mother to infant. I like PHPT because I like job type as research and development. I used to internship at Forensic DNA Unit; Faculty of Medicine, Chiang Mai University before. Routine work was linked with DNA Analysis by having an excellent Forensics Medic is my advisor. That's cause one push forward me unceasingly eager to learn. PHPT has accepted international standard, has clearly success measurement and able to report and publish the result continuously in Journal Associated Medical Science. Not only I worked at PHPT but also I used to work at Chiang Mai Poly Technique College, Royal Thai Navy and present I am working at Royal Thai Police for 1 year. For all experience, I prefer this kind of research and development work. I am interested in Neuroscience. I want to be an expert in this field. I curious what's about Neuroscience. How important and how effective with all living life. I am really grateful for opportunity of KGSP that will be support us in this scholarship in the future.

My favorite activitiy is 1.Study and Play sports. I fond of study language, especially Japanese, English and Korean. Also, I get N5 rating Japanese language (Japanese Language Proficiency Test) and I can speak Korean a little bit. 2. I used to study at Tayama Jissen School, which educate about manners, ethics, Japan culture, discipline, responsibility and time punctually. 3. I fond of playing sport, especially table tennis and badminton. My favorite athletes is Kimura Saori and Sakoda Saori. 4. Participated in Japan and Korea's culture exchanging by making traditional food. 5. Participated in English Association and the last , join an activity to build water supply at undeveloped area.

My attention is 1. Travel 2.Sport 3.Food 4.Language 5.Study 6.Music (especially : TWICE (Jeongyeon) is my favorite girl group from South Korea)
My unexpected is 1. Award as Best Poster Presentation in the topic of "Score criterion applicability for dental age estimation from third molar in Northern Thai Samples". 2. Award as outstanding student of the Forensic Science Faculty. 3. Award as 10 ranking science best score when I was a high school student.

Recently, I had visited Japan on March 2017 for increase inspiration. Unbelievable that country made me full of touched and impressed. It's my first journey aboard alone, even then it's really good experiences. I can't believe in my eyes but that's many scene of my remember like I be in a heaven.

Reason for ask scholarship and study in Korea because I need myself developed, I want to be more assertive person and self-reliant. In the present job demand for people who has knowledge of Korean language is increasing and important I believe that if I graduate, I will differentiation in the better way, have patience, laboriousness by polishing from university in Korea.

As I explained, I can sum up that the study doesn't a degree graduate receipt, but opposite it is an information augmentation for be ready using. For me, I am eager to spent knowledge to produce one of my creative research that will be a simple matter of being useful and understand easily about generally living life.

In the future, I wish I could study and work what job I love, get salary, good mind and has quality and quantity time and life with family.

oops! look so stupid, my english sentense really weired, even I was study english but my english doesn't get better T.T

I want to say thank you first for any kind if anyone will improve my gramma writting skill . \\

Thank you , Arigatou Gozaimasu , Komarworyo!!!

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Hi Potjarnard. Your essay is really confusing to read because the development of your discussion is not clear and does not offer a kind of focus that a simple topic sentence at the start of a paragraph can offer. Would you please do us a favor and post the complete prompt that you are writing this essay for? If we know all of the questions that you are trying to answer in this essay, we can help you better develop your paragraphs and remove the unnecessary information. Right now, I cannot really offer you a clear path towards editing this essay because there are 2 parts to it and I am unsure as to how these parts relate to one another. I am very sad to say that right now, very little of your essay makes sense because your English sentence structure is almost non-existent. This sounds more like a translation of your original language writing done very badly by a translation software. I will await the complete prompt before I proceed with further comments regarding the improvement of your essay.
l1h4h 3 / 5  
Nov 30, 2016   #3
Hello Euuna...
I'm glad to see your writing but allow me to give you correction :)

... scene of my remember like I be in a heaven.
--- Be to subject I = am, She/He/It = is, You/They/We = are

Hope it helps you ! :)
OP Euuuna589 1 / 3  
Nov 30, 2016   #4
@Holt
I will try again , please please please
first I want to explain that , when my korea interested begin., My study , I want to tell about myself and my experience also I want to tell my favorite , my activity and the reason why I ask for kgsp scholarship.

and of caouse I am translate from my native language, thats make me so unconfident really much.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Nov 30, 2016   #5
Potjarnard, I apologize if I made you think that I was angry at you. That was not my intention. I am looking forward to helping you improve this essay. I can totally understand how you feel and why these mistakes are occurring in your essay. Don't fret, I will make sure that this paper will get cleaned up and reflect the message that you want to deliver in accordance with the prompt requirements. So, get the prompt requirements to this thread as soon as you can. I am looking forward to working with you on this essay. I am familiar with the KGSP scholarship but I still need the prompt requirement from you because we need to present your essay in 2 parts. I need to know if it should be presented in the way that you have now or if we can merge the content to create one complete discussion of the 2 parts in a single essay. I'm not going to stop helping you until we make your essay perfect. You are not alone. Your essay will be edited properly to help you with your application,
OP Euuuna589 1 / 3  
Nov 30, 2016   #6
@Holt
Im really greatful for your generous, I will fix , I think I will solve my essay.
hmmm I am not sure myself then I need time and will present again soon as fast as possible.

Maybe some topic will be gathered and clearly about what I want to indicate.

Thank you so much.
OP Euuuna589 1 / 3  
Nov 30, 2016   #7
Thank u for let me know what wrong in my writting skill. Nothing i was angry, i am just afraid of my fault


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