I will apply nursing education in Monash University - AAS 2018

proposed course and institution choice

I will apply nursing education in Monash University. I have a high interest in education program including curriculum design, learning process, assessment, evaluation and inter-professional education. Education program has drawn my attention since I work in Indramayu collage of health science. I have done several projects and studies related to this topic. In 2017, for instance, I commenced a research about blended learning by using wound care video to increase students' performance in Objective Structured Clinical Examinations (OSCE). This research was driven by the fact that Indramayu College of Health Sciences has limited access to provide technology as an educational media for the students. This research is still on going and I am hoping to get the expected results. I gain full support from the chairperson of Indramayu College of Health Sciences who believes that this research would be useful for learning process in our institution. Nursing education in Monash University will provide in-depth learning and advance training to design effective learning method which can be implemented in my institution.

Moreover, Monash University is the only University in Australia which provides Inter-professional Education on its curriculum. I have been interested in interdisciplinary learning since I attended The International conference in Health Sciences last year. It was clearly present how multi-professional education could overcome comprehensively some health problems in Indonesia. However, Indramayu College of Health Science has not implemented inter-professional education yet. Nursing education will equip student with mastery skill of necessary to critically assess and evaluate current trends within their profession with particular reference to inter-professional education. I will discuss about implementation of inter-professional education with vice chairman of Indramayu collage health science who focusing on curriculum design and I will contrive a design of inter-professional education in my institution by using gained knowledge upon my return.

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This sentence ruins its paragraph structure. is it form general-specific or specific-general.
in my opinion you could remove this sentence or put the idea in the end paragraph.

Thank you

Your whole response to the question is inaccurate. You are basing your response on the hope that your past academic and work experience can respond to the reason why you chose proposed course and institution. That is not what happened. All you did, was elaborate on information that shows how well you misunderstood the prompt requirements. In order to deliver a correct response to this essay you need to first, identify what course you will be taking at the university. After identifying the course, explain how this choice aligns with your current and future professional needs. Based upon this criteria, delve into you academic goals and why these are important to you. After explaining your academic goals, depict similarities between your academic goals and how it will be supported under this course of study and training programs at the university you have chose. The academic and professional goals you have needs to align with the university academic goals for their students. Otherwise, there will be a lack of justification for your chosen course and institution.

i try to make new essay based on your advice, could you please correct it again. A new revision requires making this thread Urgent.

I will apply nursing education in Monash University. Monash University is the only University in Australia which provides Inter-professional Education on its curriculum for nursing students. Interdisciplinary learning has drawn my attention since I attended The International conference in Health Sciences last year. It was clearly present how multi-professional education could overcome comprehensively some health problems in Indonesia. Moreover, inter-professional education is effectively to foster inter-professional cooperation, improve professional satisfaction, and improve patient care. However, regardless of its issue on global level, most of higher education of health science in Indonesia has not implemented IPE yet including in my workplace. Recently, I work in XYZ collage of health science as a tutor and research assistant. There are some obstacles that our institution have to deal with as a reason IPE have not implement yet such as curriculum, leadership, resources, stereotypes, IPE concept, teaching, and enthusiasm.

Monash University will provide in-depth learning and advance training for their students to design IPE concept. Students reach mastery skill of necessary to critically assess and evaluate current trends within their profession with particular reference to inter-professional education. I strongly believe, such competence will prepare me to create an IPE concept for Higher education of health science in Indonesia especially in my workplace. I will discuss about ...