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Essay for bachelor degree in a German university - data analyst



manifesting 1 / 1  
Oct 5, 2025   #1
Hi, I'm currently applying for a German university and here's the topic for my scholarship essay: Please explain to us why you are the perfect candidate for this scholarship by answering one or more of the questions below. Your motivation letter should be a maximum of 500 words.
1. What academic goals are you pursuing, and how does the XXX Scholarship fit into your plans?
2. What challenges do you expect to face during your studies in Germany, and how do you plan to overcome them?

I'd love to hear your honest opinion on my essay so that I can further improve it. Thank you so much in advance!

My educational goals revolve around my aspiration of becoming a data or business analyst for global companies. I aim to acquire a comprehensive understanding of business while developing expertise in a specific domain. I also intend to master programming languages like SQL, Python, and R, as well as machine learning techniques to turn data into actionable insights. Alongside my studies, I plan to get internships where I can apply classroom knowledge to solve real-world business problems and hone soft skills such as communication and analytical thinking. Furthermore, I seek to study in an international environment where I can collaborate with people from different backgrounds, thereby broadening my horizons.

The XXX Scholarship will greatly support these goals. First, it will make it possible for me to study at XXX School, whose Computational Business Analytics program aligns perfectly with my career aspirations. The program's combination of data-related courses, including Databases and Data Management, Algorithms and Software Concepts, and Machine Learning, with business-focused modules, such as Financial Accounting, Operations Management, and Marketing, provides exactly the balance of technical and business expertise I seek. The concentration modules will allow me to specialize in a specific business area, helping me develop true domain expertise to complement my analytical skills. I am also particularly excited about the semester abroad, internships, and case studies which will provide valuable hands-on experience. Second, the scholarship will ease the financial burden, allowing me to fully dedicate myself to my studies, pursue internships, and engage in extracurricular activities within the school's dynamic community.

At the same time, I am aware that studying in Germany will come with challenges. German universities emphasize independent learning, critical thinking, and personal responsibility which is quite different from the memorization-heavy approach in my home country. To adapt, I plan to apply the discipline and independence I developed during high school. Balancing a GPA of XX with my role as Head of Finance in the school's leadership club required me to stay organized and set clear priorities, while limited in-class time taught me to self-study effectively and take initiatives in my learning to maintain a strong GPA. These lessons have prepared me to succeed in a rigorous academic environment. Additionally, I plan to make full use of the university's support systems, including study advisors and student activities, to help me adjust. Another significant challenge is the language barrier, which I intend to address by taking German courses before and during my studies. Financing my studies is also a concern, but I am determined to overcome it through scholarships and part-time jobs.

In conclusion, my academic goals entail mastering data analytics, strengthening my business knowledge, and developing marketable skills. The XXX Scholarship will enable me to pursue these goals through the interdisciplinary program at XXX School while allowing me to focus fully on my studies without financial strain. In return, I am eager to contribute to the school's community with my strong work ethic, diverse perspective, and enthusiasm.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Oct 5, 2025   #2
As you have chosen not to share the name of the scholarship program you are applying for, I am unable to give you a scholarship program specific review. Without knowing what scholarship you are applying to, I cannot help you improve the overall content of the essay. That is because each scholarship program has specific information focus for their applicants. In this case, I cannot refer to this specifics to help you improve.

While the essay does contain information that responds to the prompts provided, it does not feel informative in the manner that it should be. The information you are sharing feels generic, specially when it comes to the professional aspect of your career, after studies. Even the academic path that you hope to take enumerates the courses you will be taking, but does not fully indicate how you plan to integrate this into a solid career path. While there is an overview of your academic possibility, the professional application, the internships, and other information do not help to inform the reviewer in the proper manner.
OP manifesting 1 / 1  
Oct 5, 2025   #3
@Holt
I'm applying for International Excellence Scholarship which targets international applicants with excellent academic and extracurricular achievements. I'd really appreciate it if you can give me a scholarship program specific review and suggest specific improvements I can make. Thanks a lot!


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