Please provide comment on my essay No.1 below. Your support is much appreciated.
How did you choose your proposed course and institution?
Economists believe that the key to the growth of Mongolian economy is diversification of the economy. Ease of doing business is the most important factor for the diversification to happen. As Mongolian economy expands, commercial issues have certainly become more complicated and international, that consequently making lawyers with global grasp of commercial law in great demand. Lawyers specialized in commercial law don't only act for individuals or businesses, but also are instrumental in the public sector, such as in representing the government on the negotiation of commercial terms of contracts.
The concept of commercial law is relatively new to Mongolia. As such, commercial law subjects taught in Mongolian universities are inadequate in reflecting up-to-date commercial issues emerging these days to the program as well as in preparing the students for today's commercial world.
At my current work, XXX in Mongolia, I've observed the lack of necessary legislation and unfamiliarity of internationally recognized aspects of commercial law in Mongolia. After facing several difficulties that further proved my observation, I have decided to further study commercial law in internationally recognized level. Now that I have already gained some experience advising clients from local perspective, I believe that I'm ready to study what commercial lawyers around the world should be aware of.
From the universities offering master's degree in commercial/business law, I chose University of Melbourne and Monash University due the courses' ability to tailor a program based on my own interests. Since I have many subjects that I have grown interest during my professional experience, I hope these courses will allow me to study the aspects of commercial law that I'm interested and are hard to further study in Mongolia.
How did you choose your proposed course and institution?
the courses' ability to tailor a program based on my own interests
Economists believe that the key to the growth of Mongolian economy is diversification of the economy. Ease of doing business is the most important factor for the diversification to happen. As Mongolian economy expands, commercial issues have certainly become more complicated and international, that consequently making lawyers with global grasp of commercial law in great demand. Lawyers specialized in commercial law don't only act for individuals or businesses, but also are instrumental in the public sector, such as in representing the government on the negotiation of commercial terms of contracts.
The concept of commercial law is relatively new to Mongolia. As such, commercial law subjects taught in Mongolian universities are inadequate in reflecting up-to-date commercial issues emerging these days to the program as well as in preparing the students for today's commercial world.
At my current work, XXX in Mongolia, I've observed the lack of necessary legislation and unfamiliarity of internationally recognized aspects of commercial law in Mongolia. After facing several difficulties that further proved my observation, I have decided to further study commercial law in internationally recognized level. Now that I have already gained some experience advising clients from local perspective, I believe that I'm ready to study what commercial lawyers around the world should be aware of.
From the universities offering master's degree in commercial/business law, I chose University of Melbourne and Monash University due the courses' ability to tailor a program based on my own interests. Since I have many subjects that I have grown interest during my professional experience, I hope these courses will allow me to study the aspects of commercial law that I'm interested and are hard to further study in Mongolia.