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No community service work course; SCHOLARSHIP/ Proposed study



sopha 4 / 5  
Jun 25, 2013   #1
Please provide details of how your proposed study, research or professional development will benefit your home and host countries, including potential for ongoing linkages. (Maximum 200 words)

Many study fields provided to students every year in Laos, but there are not yet community service work course, while human resource requirement in this field has increased more and more for national development. Therefore, skilled people from overseas from community service work course could fill the gap of lacking of human resource in this field to help national development projects in both, urban and rural areas in Laos and play an important role in increasing a number of human resources in the study field through capacity building program. Furthermore, counselling skills from this study field will help the country to minimize the social problems, mental health in particular. Besides, the community service work will also benefit the donor country, Australia. Firstly, this program will benefit educational institutions to attract the students to study in these institutions through global professional network of this field. Secondly, the success of program will assist Australian's role in development domain at international stage, as it will illustrate a strong Australian commitment and a leading in high quality education and training provider, and research and innovation. Importantly, Alumni network of this program will be tools to tie the bilateral relations between two countries.

gmad06 20 / 143  
Jun 25, 2013   #2
Many study fieldsare provided to students every year in Laos

Therefore, skilled people from overseas from community service work course could fill the gap of lacking of human resource in this field to help national development projects in both, urban and rural areas in Laos and play an important role in increasing a number of human resources in the study field through capacity building program

too much chaos is seen in this sentence, avoid compounding more than two sentences to reduce error

break your main ideas into paragraphs

hope this helps
OP sopha 4 / 5  
Jun 25, 2013   #3
Thank you for your feedback, here below is edited version please give me more feed back

Many study fields are provided to students every year in Laos, but there are not yet community service work course, while human resource requirement in this field has increased more and more for national development.

Skilled people from overseas from community service work course could fill the gap of lacking of human resource in this field to help national development projects in both, urban and rural areas in Laos. This course will play an important role in increasing a number of human resources in the study field through capacity building program. Furthermore, counselling skills from this study field will help the country to minimize the social problems, mental health in particular.

Besides, the community service work will also benefit the donor country, Australia. Firstly, this program will benefit educational institutions to attract the students to study in these institutions through global professional network of this field. Secondly, the success of program will assist Australian's role in development domain at international stage, as it will illustrate a strong Australian commitment and a leading in high quality education and training provider, and research and innovation. Importantly, Alumni network of this program will be tools to tie the bilateral relations between two countries.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 25, 2013   #4
Many study fields provided to students every year in Laos, but there are not yet community service work course,

Among the many courses that are offered to students in Laos, we still don't find any that include any courses in the field of community service work.

while human resource requirement in this field has increased more and more for national development.

However, this has a national importance today due to enhanced need for qualified people in this area. Today this requirement is fulfilled by the foreign experts and the state has to incur heavy costs for hiring them.
rozha 15 / 34  
Jun 27, 2013   #5
did you mention the enfluence of international student on Australia??? i cant understand well from this subject...it is obscured :( for me ...if you write again clearly in an easy language it is better...in my view it is very complex .:(


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