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'computers & books (stories & novels)' - Need Proof Reading In My SOP



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Nov 17, 2015   #1
Asslam Alaikum Friends! I've written this SOP for UGRAID Semester Exchange Program, would you please proof read this for the mistakes I've committed & if some words could be substituted in to better sounding ones please? :) Possibly if any long sentences could be precise in better manners. I need to submit this within next few hours :)

Thank you so much ^_^
Regards: Tanweer Ahmad - 02.


Since I was child, most of my time was spent with computers and books. However, my interest was in stories and novels. Because of this my typing speed touched a peak of 123WPM where as I became good at web developing as well as blogging. To me, I bear problem solving skills at a very nice extent due to the affection towards programming.

My wish is to combine the power of hardware and software, to program the hardware in such a way that it surpasses all the limitations, everything should be communicated wirelessly. Likewise for start I have made a circuit that controls my room electricity via TV remote controller and my laser light security system that turns on the alarm if beam is interrupted.

Last year, when muettech.com hosted "Talent-Hunt-Blogging-Contest" I was the winner of this competition and got a chance to work with this team as chief blogger and then as web-developer. Just to mention I have also organized IMMUET.15 in which I fulfilled my responsibilities as web-developer (immuet.TLians.com) and programmer. I am also the global moderator at itdunya.com since 2009.

Being in USA I'll be able to take advantage of every little IoT and wireless-communication sources available there, I'll be able to get benefit of practical work over theory unlike our homeland universities. No doubt this learning tour will provide me a platform to learn new skills and share my existing knowledge with overseas students.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Nov 22, 2015   #2
Tanweer, I'd like to share my insights on the final revision of your essay.

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- Being in USAResiding in the USA, I'll be able to take advantage...

I hope this final remarks help strengthen your essay a little bit.


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