Hi, please kindly give me feedback on this essay. The maximum number of words of this essay is 300 words. I should answer the following question in this essay:
Describe a time when you demonstrated leadership. In your answer, please address the following:
- What was the context or challenge you faced?
- What specific actions did you take as a leader?
- What was the outcome, and what did you learn?
- How has this experience shaped your approach to leadership?
Thanks!
I've been developing and leading impactful education and business for 10 years. After graduating, I co-founded a waste management business and eventually merged with friends with shared visions, who just co-founded a holistic Islamic boarding school (XXX). The numbers of students and teachers have grown from only around 30 and dozens in 2015 to approximately 500 students and 180 teachers now. Not just an ordinary school, we're developing an education-centred area with focus in leadership, noble character, health, and environment. From only less than 1 hectare, currently we manage almost 9 hectares.
Around 2022, we evaluated that the students' leadership skills needed improvement. As the Head of Students Affair, I established programs for building leadership. These include trainings, coaching, etc. Through evaluation, the result showed significant improvement in the students' leadership, proven by improving organizational skills, better execution and mindset. We also support the students to achieve as high as possible. In 2024, with only around 400 students, we reached 252 achievements in various fields such as science, sport, etc.
To support scholarship for the poor students and embark entrepreneurship, we built business unit, called YYY in 2017 which I've led from the start. YYY focuses in non-ultra processed food (UPF) fish-based products for children, due to our concern about UPF intake among children in Indonesia, reaching 45% of total calories consumption. UPF is known to cause many health problems. We empower local people; we grow from only 2 workers in 2017 to currently more than 50. Our revenue increased almost 700% from 2020 to 2024. Since 2022, we've become strategic partner of Bank Indonesia in the integrated food ecosystem, aiming to control inflation. Currently, our products are distributed in more than 15 big cities in Indonesia and also accepted by modern trade e.g. Lotte Mart.
Describe a time when you demonstrated leadership. In your answer, please address the following:
- What was the context or challenge you faced?
- What specific actions did you take as a leader?
- What was the outcome, and what did you learn?
- How has this experience shaped your approach to leadership?
Thanks!
I've been developing and leading impactful education and business for 10 years. After graduating, I co-founded a waste management business and eventually merged with friends with shared visions, who just co-founded a holistic Islamic boarding school (XXX). The numbers of students and teachers have grown from only around 30 and dozens in 2015 to approximately 500 students and 180 teachers now. Not just an ordinary school, we're developing an education-centred area with focus in leadership, noble character, health, and environment. From only less than 1 hectare, currently we manage almost 9 hectares.
Around 2022, we evaluated that the students' leadership skills needed improvement. As the Head of Students Affair, I established programs for building leadership. These include trainings, coaching, etc. Through evaluation, the result showed significant improvement in the students' leadership, proven by improving organizational skills, better execution and mindset. We also support the students to achieve as high as possible. In 2024, with only around 400 students, we reached 252 achievements in various fields such as science, sport, etc.
To support scholarship for the poor students and embark entrepreneurship, we built business unit, called YYY in 2017 which I've led from the start. YYY focuses in non-ultra processed food (UPF) fish-based products for children, due to our concern about UPF intake among children in Indonesia, reaching 45% of total calories consumption. UPF is known to cause many health problems. We empower local people; we grow from only 2 workers in 2017 to currently more than 50. Our revenue increased almost 700% from 2020 to 2024. Since 2022, we've become strategic partner of Bank Indonesia in the integrated food ecosystem, aiming to control inflation. Currently, our products are distributed in more than 15 big cities in Indonesia and also accepted by modern trade e.g. Lotte Mart.
