After finishing my scholarship, I intend to develop my organization and serve my country

waitting for your reviews pleaaase, thanks in advance

chevening career plan

Planning for my career is always a turning point in my life. It depends on so many factors such as what you have got, what you are doing now and what you are intending to do in the future.

For me after finishing my scholarship, I intend to develop my organization and serve my country for giving me the opportunity to have the first step which is completed by the Chevening scholarship.

One of the main major problems in Egypt is the health sector, as there is a huge disproportion between the total number of graduate doctors and the actual number of doctors who work in the health sector which is estimated by only one third of the total number, the remaining are working abroad for so many reasons.

So, I want to have my own trend and path and work here in Egypt to improve health care in my organization, sector then country wise.

The first thing I will to do is training my junior colleagues at the radiology department and put a plan and goals, using my experience I got in UK.

Also I will make a plane to raise the standard of my department in developing the system of communication and informing other departments and I will discuss it with head`s department and will start applying it, beside resuming my master degree in diagnostic radiology that I have already started.

working in police hospital make us liable to see some diseases more than others (occupational diseases) one of my plans is to raise the awareness with these diseases and applying a screening program to protect them and decrease the morbidity rate.

I am also ambitious to seek a specialized clinical degree as the Egyptian fellowship in interventional radiology then start FRCR, Cheveing will help me a lot in applying for this step.

Within 5 years, I hope that what I did in my department and how I developed it will be applied on all other police hospitals of the institution.

After 7 to 8 years I hope the established effective system we started in police hospital become applicable to all health sector hospital all over Egypt, and this system may help us in trimming the aggressive environment of Egypt to attract more Egyptian doctors to work here.

After 10 years I want to see the development of health sector of Egypt and becoming among the best sectors in the world.
All big dreams started as a wish of someone, I hope to be that someone who will be able to achieve that wish by what I have now and by the hard work and the experience I will get from the scholarship.

Dear Meyamoo

I am a bit confused. Are you currently doing your Master's in Egypt, which you want to interrupt to go to the UK for a different Masters? If so, you might need to elaborate on why you need a double master's in order to fulfill your career plan.

You also neglected to include a reference to what the UK government is doing in Egypt, as required by the prompt. You need to tell them how you can help them, not only how they can help you.

There are many grammar issues in your essay which I could assist with, but I suspect you will have to rewrite a large part of your essay so I won't point out specifics now.

Good luck

Mai, there is no clear professional plan for yourself upon your graduation. The presentation "implies" a series of plans, but no real idea as to how it can be implemented. The post study plan needs to accomplish two things:

1. Depict a clear plan to elevate your career by working for specific organizations or companies upon your return that will help to hone the skills that you picked up in the UK.

2. Portray a UK government subsidized project in your country that relates to your profession / UK training which can allow you to help promote the UK interests in your country.

Neither of the two most important components of the prompt are represented in this essay. You also went overboard with your long range plans. Keep it down to 5 years. That is long range enough for a masters degree graduate. The 7-10 year plan is more related to a PhD course. Stay within realistic time frames for a professional with an international masters degree. You say you will develop your organization. Does the organization already exist? In what capacity? How do you plan to move it forward? Can it be integrated into a UK sponsored project? If yes, how? These are some of the elements that you need to represent in your essay. Hopefully you can reflect all of these in the revised version.