What will you do after finishing school? Supporting Statement - Australia Awards Scholarship

Hi everyone, please kindly review my short answer (limited to 500 characters) below:

What are your plans when you finish your studies*?

Upon my return, I would like to apply for a job as a forensic accountant at a top-tier management consulting firm. Having experience at XYZ, I am familiar with the working environment and I am excited to move back there to continue my career. Ultimately, I intend to contribute my knowledge and skills collaborating with government to strengthen anti-corruption regimes in the future through fraud prevention and detection management of financial crimes.

@Milkx_Tea your response is confusing. If you have already worked at XYZ company and you are planning to return there after you graduate then say that immediately. Don't beat around the bush saying you will apply for a job when all you have to do is go back to the old company. Or, do you mean that you will apply for a new job there because you had to resign when you decided to study this masters degree? If that is the case, then you should clearly explain that to the reviewer. You also need to make specific references as to how you plan to contribute to the development of this sector upon your return. Be more career specific in your explanation. This is just a wee bit vague in presentation and doesn't really clearly explain your after study plans.