Prompt: If your did not get this scholarship, what are your plans for the next four years. 300-400words
If I fail in this battle for a change and failure indicates my hope of acquiring bachelor's degree through X scholarship at X university, I will not let the outcome deter my hope for the future and aspiration to change the situation of things in my community. My life experience thought me that failure is not denial, but opportunity to plan better and through perseverance and self determination one can overcome, so if I fail to be a X scholar, my future plans are very clear cuts.
Since my graduation from high school in 2012, I have been working as a sales boy in a shop, so if I don't get this scholarship, I will continue working as the sales boy in the shop. Saving token from my salary as I have been doing since 2012, in order to reach target amount to finance myself to the university. I solely believe in the next five years, I would have reached an amount that will allow me to apply to a university and I will combine part time work to render other necessary supports.
''Consistency practices, enhance the functions of the brain''-Myself.
Working for four years might affect my academics performance, since two years ago that I graduated from high school, I have been involving in selfless services of teaching, tutoring and counselling of younger people in my community and I hope to continue for over four years, if I don't get this scholarship, this tutoring have been helping me to updating myself academically, as I haven't have the opportunity to further my education. The outcome of this has been great, as it has helped some of my community people to improve their intellectual and acquired competence in some subject. The minor counselling, also empowered them to search for knowledge, which has been helping them to discover their true self and potentials.
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Adeyemi, your essay does not answer the prompt at all. Rather than talking about your academic history, you should have been discussing the plans that you have in case you do not win the scholarship. Meaning you have to tell the reader what exactly your plans are in case you have to pay your way through college. What will it be like for you? How difficult will it be for you to complete your studies without the scholarship? How do you see yourself accomplishing your goal of completing a college degree within that time frame? Would it be possible? Will it take you longer? Do you have any back up plans for enrollment (do not say you are applying to other scholarships. That will be bad for your application) in case you don't get the financing you need from this scholarship foundation? These are but some of the questions that you can and should answer in your essay. These are the responses that they are looking for. I hope you can revise the essay to fit the guide questions I supplied to you. I will help you redirect the essay towards the proper outcome if you will work with me on it :-)
to my mind, i really think that @modewap should exploit the other aspect which is if you get the scholarship, what you will do next
Vangiespen, thanks for your feedback and general view about my essay, I've written another one with respect to your above suggestion. I will be glad to receive your further feedback, when I'm done with the typing.
Thanks.
Vangiespen, thanks for your feedback, I have typed this essay, I hope this essay answer all your aforementioned questions ''If you have to pay what will that be? How difficult will it be for you to complete your studies with the finance? How do you see yourself accomplishing your goal of completing a college degree within the time frame? Would it be possible? Will it takes you longer? Do you have any back ups?''
any suggestions or general view about this new essay. I developed this essay as the scholarship focus on lowest economy disadvantage person. Thanks for rendering your helping hands.
Remembering how my parents struggled hard to enroll me and my sibling into a public high school, even sourcing for money to buy uniform, text books and bag wasn't it easy for them, as they had to reduce our daily feeding in order to buy the school uniform and we had to carry our notes book to school on our hands till they could afford polyethylene bag. As a person that knows this struggle and rigors, asking my parent to finance my university's education is very impossible as they won't be able to afford the fee and I can't get a student loan or well paid job to finance myself for now. All these set back can not make me afford a tertiary education in the next four years, so if I fail to be a X scholar, my future four years plans are very clear cuts.
Being a person that value education, ever since my graduation from high school in 2012, I have been working as a sales boy and I hope to work for more years, in order to reach a target amount that will help me finance my university education. As Abraham Lincoln said ''I walk slowly, but I never walk backward''.
My little saving might not help me to finance a university's degree in time frame of next four years but I sure know that I will hit a target some years and I solely believe when the target is reach, I will finance my education and combine a part time job to render other necessary supports.
''Consistency is an assessment, that enhance the functions of human brain''-Myself.
Working for four or more years might have a negative effect on my academics performances. But since two years ago that I graduated from high school, I had involved myself in selfless services of tutoring and counselling of younger people in my community. I hope to continue for over four years, if I don't get this scholarship. The tutoring had been helping me to updating myself academically, as I haven't have the opportunity to further my education. Talking about the outcome, I felt it has been great, as it has helped some of my community people to improve their intellectual and acquired competence in academics. The minor counselling, has been empowering them to search for knowledge, to tap their potentials and get their purpose in life.
Adeyemi, let me offer you an example of how to answer this particular prompt. It does not need to be this long nor long winded. Consider the following a template for your next revision :-)
My family has always struggled to make ends meet on a day to day basis. Our financial struggles weighed down my family so much that finishing school, be it primary, secondary, or tertiary, was never a sure thing for my sibling and I. Yet it never deterred us from dreaming of and achieving dreams that went far beyond the abilities of our station in life. Our determination to change our lives for the better has always been the driving force behind everything that we do, regardless of failure. That is why I know that even if I am unfortunate enough to not be awarded this scholarship, I will never give up on my dreams of college. Although it will be rough and it may take me longer than four years, I am determined to get my college diploma and have a rewarding career afterwards.
I am currently working part time to help my family with our immediate needs. I work harder than everyone else in the family because I am pushed to provide for my own educational needs. Having said that, I know that without this scholarship, I will triple my efforts to work and earn the money that I need to fund my college education. Working part time and studying is not a bad habit for one to have and in my case, it will be only way that I can achieve my goals and ambitions in life. I need to help myself because if I don't help myself first, there won't be a reason for other people to want to help me either. So I will have to figure out the perfect balance between work and academics. Impossible? I don't believe so.
Sure working and studying at the same time could have an adverse effect on my academic standing. Provided I do not fail in any of my classes, then I have not failed as a student and I know that I will eventually achieve my dreams. As Abraham Lincoln once said ''I walk slowly, but I never walk backward''. Therefore, with or without this scholarship, I will achieve my college dreams and improve my lot in life. I will just have to work harder and longer to achieve it. I won't give up because by persevering in life, I know that the rewards at the end will be sweeter and well deserved on my part.
See how this template works as a reference for you. Feel free to use this as is if you wish to also. I won't mind :-)
