Helping the poor and the underprivileged. Essay on my values and passion as a person

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Q: We want to hear what you are passionate about and what motivates you . write about a topic that reflects who you are/your values

Helping others

The old man smiled thankfully through his brown teeth and freckled face as I dropped my last change in his bowl, he was the old beggar that begged close to our school gate. I smiled and nodded back and then ran off for lectures. Putting smiles on people's faces gives me joy; it gives me a sense of satisfaction knowing I am the reason behind their smile. I am really passionate about helping people.

My passion for helping people motivated me to join a local community intervention initiative which was geared towards reaching out to the poor and less privileged in the community. I contributed to the program in my own little way by donating some of my old clothes. I pictured the smiles that will spread across the lips of the unclad children when they receive the clothes and it brought joy to my heart.

I believe everybody has equal right to happiness no matter their situation and financial status. Empathy and compassion are my core values, I believe in giving humanity a chance because nobody is responsible for his/her predicament. I try putting myself in some people's shoes so as to share their pain; this motivates me to do something to make things better for them.

One day I hope to start my own community aid initiative that will help the poor and the underprivileged in my community especially the orphans. I being an orphan myself knows what it feels like to be one.

This really is an excellent short essay whose storyline is clear and tight.
I pictured the smiles that would spread ...

It brought great joy into my heart when I pictured about the smiles spreading across the lips of the unclad children who would receive my clothes.

Ameh, you should have a simple sentence or two at the start that will help you establish the foundation of your passion for helping people. You need to explain what circumstances led you to be motivated to help those in need. That in turn, should help you establish the situation or reason that led to this becoming your passion. While the story of helping the old man tugs at the heart strings, you are not writing a creative essay. You are writing a narrative essay that establishes who you are through your motivation and passion in life. Try to rephrase the essay in a manner that allows you to establish the foundation before you present the actions connected with it. That way the essay gains a better essence of how these actions developed who you are today. Don't rely on the story to establish that for you because it does not. In fact, aside from creating an interesting hook, it doesn't really help to establish any information about you in terms of motivation and passion development.

Thank you very much @qin6882060 and @Holt..
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