I intend to apply for the Chevening 2018-19 scholarship - Career Plan question

Hi, can you please help in reviewing my answer to career plan question. I intend to apply for the Chevening 2018-19 scholarship so I have began my home work. I look forward to your corrections,thanks in waiting.

my plans upon returning to Sierra Leone

After the end of our ten years of civil war, Sierra Leone have been creeping to rebuild its health system and concurrently battling with emerging and reemerging diseases. The 2014 deadly Ebola virus disease outbreak unravels the weakness of our health sector and showcasing that, Sierra Leone is in need for well-trained and qualified local scientists to conduct scientific research on the front line to help build a resilient health system.

My immediate plans upon returning to Sierra Leone after the successful completion of my proposed Masters studies includes; utilizing my new skills in the interest of my nation by kick starting a modern laboratory base research on diseases most affecting our country through improve laboratory diagnosis and disease surveillance, and cascading this new knowledge to other laboratory scientists in-country. I am strongly convinced that, the knowledge and experience I would gain doing a master's degree in the United Kingdom would make me a highly motivated individual with the sufficient knowledge and skills to become a better Laboratory research scientist and hence set me apart from my colleagues.

My career objectives include but not limited to; Understanding the genome of our life threaten pathogens like Ebola Virus, Lassa Virus, Plasmodium falciparum, S. typhi, yellow fever etc. and how the host immunity respond to their infection. My aspiration is to see my country on a better footing to hunt these pathogens and to combat any future outbreak.

Within the next couple of years after my Master's degree, i aim to enter into graduate school complete my PhD and in the future develop my own research laboratory and become the principal investigator to answer scientific question on diseases in Sierra Leone. This is because I believe it is very important for Sierra Leone to have well trained and qualify Sierra Leonean scientists conducting research on infectious disease in our own soil, so that we can develop effective therapeutics and vaccines for the diseases most affecting us. I am sure that with this, I will be able to make huge contribution to strengthen the health system in Sierra Leone as this area of development is very key for my country to build a robust health system and it is my aspiration to further these goals.

If I am granted this scholarship i promise to give in return as much as i can to strengthen the health care system by and undertake several laboratory research projects on hidden or unknown pathogens within and out of Sierra Leone.

@Jopa 1
Hi I am learning english too.Your scholarship has some problem . Fisrly the content, you should give reasons why you are intersted in Sierra Leone . May be because now doctors are the wonderful job which can help people or save them from death. Or may be some factors such as you want to deaign some thing that you did in your dream when you are a little kid.

Secondly,you did use so many academic words. It id good for you because it can give us mor information but it also makes people become little tired when they have to read all of that stuff .

Thirdly, your grammar has a little problem that you should control it . For example : I am granted this scholarship i promise to give in return as much as i can you are using if please give will or should

John, you are required to outline your plan covering a time span of 5-10 years. Therefore, you cannot just present the generalized discussion of your post study career plan. You need to go year by year in the description. Create estimates regarding how long it will take for you to complete each phase of your proposed career plan. Base this upon the difficulties that you might be facing in implementing these career goals and explain these difficulties that could prevent you from speedily progressing in your career plans. You must also work on a more expanded discussion of how the Chevening scholarship will be able to help you and your home country. For this discussion, you can think along the lines of the network that Chevening will be able to help you create and thus, use it to help increase the chances of doing well funded research in an effort to improve the health situation in your country.

Thanks very much folks for the corrections and recommendations. I will work on it and get it floated.

No, no, no, no. You cannot say "Looking forward, five years (5)..." The proper format goes this way:

Six months after I graduate, I hope to be employed at a laboratory in Sierra Leone where I can plant the seeds for my desire to have my own laboratory. I hope to be able to apply what I have learned and also, build upon certain ideas that I have in relation to... After 3 years of working at this laboratory, I will get funding for a 2 year research plan that aims to discover.... In order to get funding, I will do the following things.

The above detailed format is what you have to present in your essay. The same format applies all the way to the 10th year of your career plan. If you feel that you do not have a 10 year career plan, then just present your ideas as far as your actual career plan will cover.

Thanks! Holt. below is how I have reshaped my answer.

Sierra Leone is in need for well-trained and qualified local scientists to conduct scientific research on diseases that are threat to public health. This is because it is important for Sierra Leoneans and health practitioners to know the health status of their Nation so that effective preventive measures for current and potential diseases will be established.

My career objectives include but not limited to; Understanding the genome of our life threaten pathogens like Ebola Virus, Lassa Virus, Plasmodium falciparum, S. typhi, yellow fever etc. and how the host immunity respond to their infection. My aspiration is to see my country on a better footing to hunt these pathogens and to combat any future disease outbreak.

My immediate plan upon returning home is to get connected with Chevening Alumni in Sierra Leone. One month after my MSc. graduation, I hope to resume my job at the Lassa fever Viral Hemorrhagic Fever Laboratory in Sierra Leone, where I will be able to apply what I have learned and also, build upon certain ideas that I have in relation to disease research and diagnostics. I am also going to cascading some of my new skills and techniques to the other laboratory scientists working at the Lassa Lab.

After 2 years of working at this laboratory, I hope to secure funding for a 4 year PhD study research plan that will aim at understanding the genetic biomarkers of Lassa virus. This I believe will make me self-efficient in meeting my aspiration.

Should I am granted this scholarship, I am sure with Chevening, I will be able to create more networks that I will take advantage of in sourcing funds for my PhD research in other to build my capacity and help me to meet my career plan.

5 years after my PhD, I hope to work with partners to help develop my own research laboratory and become the principal investigator to answer scientific question on the emerging and re-emerging diseases in Sierra Leone.

I strongly believe that, with these knowledge and experience gain during both my master's degree and PhD studies, I will be well oriented to contribute to the health system in my country by engaging in research and improving on the quality laboratory diagnosis and it is my aspiration to further these goals.

Alright, this is the best version of the career plan essay that you have developed as of now. Therefore, this should be the version that you use with your other application essays. It covers enough of the career path for the reviewer to see that you have a serious career path in mind and that you will be conscious of your obligation to help propagate the Chevening Scholarship mission and objectives. So the reviewer will definitely accept the explanation that you have in this essay. Remove paragraph 5 and 6. Those are too short and do not really help to better illustrate an immediate career path for you. Acquiring a PhD may not align itself with the plans that you have presented. Normally, the PhD is not a required response in this sort of essay. Try to further expand your explanation regarding your 2 year and 5 year career plans. They are too short to actually be informative. Think about this time and give a more detailed explanation of the kind of professional career growth you hope to have.

Thanks Very much Holt and folks for your patience in reviewing my work. I hope to work on paragraph 5&6 as instructed. Appreciated.