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Instructions: Respond to the following prompt with a paragraph.
Prompt: What is an intellectual concept that you find stimulating and what does it tell us about you?
How many doctors and pharmacologists would be honest enough to tell you that there are effective natural cures and remedies, even if they stood to loose billions of dollars? Can the average consumer actually see what the real truth is up against? Honest doctors have confessed that prescription medications have deleterious effects and that there are other, more natural substances, like herbs, that can treat and and even cure certain ailments such as diabetes, liver disease, heart disease, and certain cancers. However, the nefarious FDA does not endorse natural cures, as it cannot garner profits from herbs. The FDA tries to engrave the idea that natural is bad for you so that the multi-billion dollar drug industry does not dwindle. Meanwhile, millions of innocent and misinformed people are not receiving the most efficient treatments, and their life might be at risk as a result. As I am a purveyor of honesty, I would like to see human kind benefit from knowing the truth, however harsh. I am also an aspiring physician, so I care about true science not pseudoscience. Accordingly, the uncovering of fraudulent "medical facts" is an intellectual topic near and dear to me.
Instructions: Respond to the following prompt with a paragraph.
Prompt: What is an intellectual concept that you find stimulating and what does it tell us about you?
How many doctors and pharmacologists would be honest enough to tell you that there are effective natural cures and remedies, even if they stood to loose billions of dollars? Can the average consumer actually see what the real truth is up against? Honest doctors have confessed that prescription medications have deleterious effects and that there are other, more natural substances, like herbs, that can treat and and even cure certain ailments such as diabetes, liver disease, heart disease, and certain cancers. However, the nefarious FDA does not endorse natural cures, as it cannot garner profits from herbs. The FDA tries to engrave the idea that natural is bad for you so that the multi-billion dollar drug industry does not dwindle. Meanwhile, millions of innocent and misinformed people are not receiving the most efficient treatments, and their life might be at risk as a result. As I am a purveyor of honesty, I would like to see human kind benefit from knowing the truth, however harsh. I am also an aspiring physician, so I care about true science not pseudoscience. Accordingly, the uncovering of fraudulent "medical facts" is an intellectual topic near and dear to me.