"Korean language" - why I want to take a part in KGSP program?

My name is ..., from Dubai . I'm 20 years old.
I would like to explain you why I want to take a part in KGSP program . We are living in age of fast paste development where is necessary to know foreign languages. Firstly, my main target is getting an adequate knowledge in foreign language for being a bilingual expert. In addition it is a possibility to share with knowledge with other student . Furthermore, studying in foreign university can give me a perfect opportunity to take courses in foreign language . In my opinion, I should learn more interesting subjects, if I want to be well-qualified and high-educated professional. As I know, this program gives a wide selection of universities which provide additional courses and interesting classes.Also Korean education system is one of the best in the world .

Secondly, I think that studying Korean universities is not only getting knowledge, but also discovering something new. One of my desires is meeting different people of different nationalities, cultures and also with different lifestyles and points of view. The diversity will broaden my horizons and help me to feel myself a member of the global community. All of these would be a big life experience and as we know experience is the best teacher.

In conclusion I want to say that KGSP program gives me a chance to learn the language, enter the university and realize my plans.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,

I was raised amongst a very modest middle classI , have a small but very friendly family. , we living together in the beautiful Country of Kyrgyzstan . My family members are five , we live together , my father is businessman , and my mother is pharmacist works in the pharmacy , and my older sister is a nurse, and, now she lives and works in Russia with her husband, my little sister student high school

Despite of the fact that it is quite difficult for me to learn foreign languages, I was always interested in other languages and cultures. So I'm fluent in Russian and Korean, I speak English at Intermediate level and have basic knowledge of Arabic. I was always willing to learn Korean because now Korean language is one of the common languages in the world .

after high school when I had an opportunity to change something I made a very drastic step . i came to Korea last year to Korean Language because I know education system here is very world wide. which provided me with an occasion to live in Korea and learn Korean language and culture Since I moved there on my own, without any family members, I had to adapt myself for the new culture and language as quick as possible, so my knowledge of Korean language

after high school when I had an opportunity to change something I made a very drastic step . which provided me with an occasion to live in Korea and learn Korean language and culture . I enrolled at Inha University and studied the Korean language for one year. I know it will help me a lot for my interest in entering the Korean Universities . during the year i received korean proficiency exam level 3 . I know my one year is not enough to learn the Language even it's culture . Given a chance I'm willing to learn more this Language . Also, I'm learning English little by little . This will help me a lot in dealing and speaking globally . I moved there on my own, without any family members, I had to adapt myself for the new culture and language as quick as possible, so my knowledge of Korean language

This part above is not interesting enough to be at the start of your essay. I think they will know your name and age from looking at other information you provide in your application. I think they do not need to know that you would like to explain why you want to take part, because you are going to explain anyway. The key to strong writing is to avoid using more words and sentences than necessary. For that reason, I think it's best to get rid of this part above.

You have the word paste in this essay, but it should say paced.

In addition it is a possibility an opportunity to share with knowledge with other students.

My family members are five; we live together. My father is a businessman , and my mother is pharmacist. works in the pharmacy , and
My older sister is a nurse, and now she lives and works in Russia with her husband. My little sister is a high school student.

: ) Good luck in your studies! Keep working hard to improve your written English.

Thank you for your remarks

To be able to write in 40 minutes, I have to shorten my introductions. I will try to do that in my next essays.