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Prompt: In this essay, you should discuss your educational goals, including why you wish to study your chosen major.
My educational goal is to major in either psychology or Pre-Medicine. I wish to do so because my professional goal is to apply practical solutions to health-related challenges faced by people not only in the United States but throughout the world. I realized that I have the ability to help people when I started to volunteer at Henrico Doctor's Hospital and Retreat Hospital. Volunteering at those hospitals not only gave me the chance to help the patients and the staff, but it also gave me a chance to explore possible career options in the medical field. I currently take Psychology in high school and I believe that it is a very interesting option for a career field in that I can help patients that could otherwise not perform basic life functions such as develop socially.
During my time learning psychology, I developed a passion to help patients function socially; this fueled my interest in cognitive psychology. During the summer after 11th grade, I volunteered at two hospitals. As I have mentioned previously, my tenure there has made me really interested in Pre-Medicine. Although this has been a dilemma for me in that I now aspire to be a general physician, it has also helped me. Being accepted into VCU with a scholarship gives me the ability to go on the Pre-Medicine advising track while choosing my majoring Psychology. After one year as an undergraduate student, I then can make my decision to see whether I want to continue my goal of being a psychologist or pursue my dream of being a physician because I would have already taken classes for both fields of study.
Prompt: In this essay, you should discuss your educational goals, including why you wish to study your chosen major.
My educational goal is to major in either psychology or Pre-Medicine. I wish to do so because my professional goal is to apply practical solutions to health-related challenges faced by people not only in the United States but throughout the world. I realized that I have the ability to help people when I started to volunteer at Henrico Doctor's Hospital and Retreat Hospital. Volunteering at those hospitals not only gave me the chance to help the patients and the staff, but it also gave me a chance to explore possible career options in the medical field. I currently take Psychology in high school and I believe that it is a very interesting option for a career field in that I can help patients that could otherwise not perform basic life functions such as develop socially.
During my time learning psychology, I developed a passion to help patients function socially; this fueled my interest in cognitive psychology. During the summer after 11th grade, I volunteered at two hospitals. As I have mentioned previously, my tenure there has made me really interested in Pre-Medicine. Although this has been a dilemma for me in that I now aspire to be a general physician, it has also helped me. Being accepted into VCU with a scholarship gives me the ability to go on the Pre-Medicine advising track while choosing my majoring Psychology. After one year as an undergraduate student, I then can make my decision to see whether I want to continue my goal of being a psychologist or pursue my dream of being a physician because I would have already taken classes for both fields of study.