Natural aptitude or skill / values and behavior - Questbridge essay

Our values often shape our behavior. Tell us about a value you hold. 400 Words
tal·ent
/ˈtalənt/
noun
1. natural aptitude or skill.
Since I was young, I'd been making art, and people have told me how "talented" I am, but I've never felt "talented". As stated in the Oxford dictionary, the word Talent means "natural aptitude or skill", and it was never natural for me to make great art. It was because, over the years, I've been analyzing colors, proportions, and values, and ensuring that each line and color became more refined with each iteration.
Thus, I believe that it isn't just talent that has helped me improve, but also passion and hard work. I've come to value hard work as I've realized that it is something that I will continue to act upon.
I hope to continuously work hard on myself as an artist and an overall person.

Do not give the reviewer a lesson in word definition and pronunciation. He will view that as insulting and condescending. Just go directly into your statement Stop repeating the dictionary definition in your response. it is useless. The way that you discuss the value of talent is not enough. It lacks a reference to hard work, discipline, and other actions that help a person develop character, which is the end development of a talent or skill. As a value, consider how you use your talent for the arts in a way that helps others. A value should be something that drives you to help others or help others improve as well. It should be a personal belief for the most part. I believe that you need to develop your discussion in a manner more aligned with a "values" discussion and expectation.