Real estate contractor manager - Chevening leadership and influencing skills essay

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Chevening Essay (Leadership and influence skills)

Is leadership a personal trait or it could be gained through experience and practice? I think that leadership could be gained through practice according to my personal experiences.

From early years, when I was twelve years old I had represented my primary school in an academic competition with my colleagues, although my school did not the first place in a winning prize I had developed an organizational and leadership skills.

In the university, I was a leader of a group of my colleagues ( eleven persons) in a survey camp out of capital city. This experience offered to me management skills, motivation, influencing and leadership skills to accomplish the work as planned.

From recent experiences, I was working as a construction manager (project manager) in a Real Estate company in a project consisted of ground plus nine floors. The project was far behind the timetable when I started the work and I was responsible for the success of the project. So, it was challenging to succeed the project toward the planned timetable. My role was influencing and motivating the teamwork to carry out the project as planned.

To sum up, I have developed leadership and influencing skills which I hope to use it in making a positive change in my home country.

Your leadership reference is quite weak. However, you can focus on emphasizing specific instances in which you were able to use your leadership skills to influence a situation. You can focus on one strong point, and develop that other than two very weak points.

Mohammed, the essay is too short to be descriptive if you leadership and influencing skills. The reviewer will need detailed explanations of each event, experience, and results of your management skills. It would be best if you did not refer to a time when you were 12 years old as that is not considered a part of an actual leadership and influencing skill. The information required from this essay should start with your college years as an academic leader, or your ability to lead a community organization. An of these two extended examples should culminate in your professional leadership and influencing skills. That part in particular should be the most extended and relevant discussion in this essay. Unfortunately, you have not produced the expected discussion in this essay. So you need to write a new essay that will follow the requirements of the scholarship evaluation committee. The problem is that you have written the essay too close to the deadline. I hope that we will still have enough time to correct the problems with this essay and perfect it for submission with your application.

Focus the revision on how you lead the group of classmates during the survey camp out. Then your work as a construction manager should be fully developed to display your leadership maturity and development of your influencing skills, the basis of which should be clearly explained in the college leadership and influencing paragraph of your presentation.

Dear Mary Rose,
Thank you for your helpful response.
Unfortunately, I have missed the deadline of Chevening application. However, with regret, I have submitted the uncorrected essays!
Do I have to withdraw my application?

If you wish to withdraw your application at this time then you may do so. Yes, you still have a chance to withdraw your application. However, you must provide a valid reason for doing so. You also need to know that since the applications are now closed, you will have to wait for the 2019-2020 cycle to open next year before you can apply again. Actually, there is very little sense in withdrawing your application because if your submitted documents do not qualify you for the scholarship then you will not get past the screening process. The reading committee will never know that you did not make it the first time you applied for the scholarship.

If you decide to withdraw your application for this cycle, then use the next year to strengthen all aspects of your application in reference to Chevening requirements for the documentation and essay submissions. I have had some applicants realize late in the game that they lack qualifications to qualify through the screening process and they often choose to stop their application at this point in order to improve their chances next year. If you believe you can do that then I strongly support your desire to withdraw your application at this point.