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Statement of purpose for pursuing a Bachelor of Computer Science in Hungary.



ahad 1 / -  
Dec 10, 2022   #1
This is my first time I am writing Motivational letter for foreign scholarship.Your kind words will be very helpful for me

To whom it may concern,

ABC is my name, and I'm from Pakistan. I'm a computer science bachelor's degree candidate. My ultimate ambition in life is to create an Information and Communication Technologies (IICT) institute in Pakistan and to become the CEO of a software company where more than 10,000 developers and HR managers will work. I hope to do this in the next ten years.

==> Why I choose computer Science field???



I was a bright child from birth. I consistently placed first in my school. And I've always been a student who was addicted to getting praise all the time. Asian nations like Pakistan and India love to play cricket. I also played cricket with my classmates and developed into a skilled player among pupils my age. When my cricket team lost its final game in district Gujranwala in the 10th grade, I served as captain. I am a competitive speaker in addition to being a superb cricket player. And in my four speech competitions, which were held at the district level in my country in one year, I placed second, third, third, and first, respectively. Additionally, I received the school's speaker of the year award and was always the stage manager whenever an event took place. Because of my high grades in my eighth grade, I received a scholarship worth RS. 70k. We have four brothers, and according to school records, I was the youngest and smartest of the four. Because of this, each person had a different expectation of me. ABC, my elder brother, was a talented cricketer and wanted me to play for teams around the world. Because of my talks, my father, who regularly watched the news on television, encouraged me to work in journalism or politics.As time went on, one of my brothers was accepted to a university to pursue a degree in computer science, and he wanted me to work in the IT industry. A young computer science teacher was my favourite in school. He was my favourite because he was a brilliant cricket player and a kind person. After school, I used to go to his place for tutoring. And he makes an effort to inspire me by describing the latest technological advances. He used to talk to me about hackathons and other coding competitions, emphasising how valuable they are if we enter them properly. I began participating in coding competitions about this time.In ninth grade, I studied C. My matriculation was in computer science, and I received 99 out of 100 in that subject. I received a 92.5% overall grade point average. My laptop was provided by the Punjab government's Youth Initiative Program. I received a laptop on the basis of my own merit. I have attached all of the scholarship and laptop award certificates to my application. I became more familiar with the computer field in this way.

One at a time.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Dec 11, 2022   #2
This is not a motivational letter at all. It is more of a personal biography than anything else. It does not relate to a motivation but rather, to the background and personal influences discussion. As the screener, I would fail to see how this discussion relates to an academic or career motivation. It does not focus on the correct discussion points in relation to a specific interest in computers.

I have no interest in your family background and dynamic since none of these information directed the applicant towards a relevant motivation. I want to read immediately about what career plans you havepost undergraduate studies that led to your decision to study computer science. The current presentation is useless as a motivation letter.
Pettypet 4 / 12  
Dec 12, 2022   #3
You are applying for a scholarship in the computer science field hence I do not see how your prowess in cricket relates to why you want to pursue computer science. I think you should draft your letter based on what is pushing you to want to study computer science. It could be personal experience, interests or external factors.
txmdd 1 / 2  
Dec 13, 2022   #4
the letter should be around 500 - 750 words with several paragraphs answering different questions: Why Hungary? Why this school? Why computer science?Why you are the right candidate.
Slyrae /  
Dec 16, 2022   #5
If you'd like to talk about your background and family, mention a specific event/experience or go more in depth about your brother and how he influenced you and your interest with computer science. Explain how this event/experience or your brother changed you and (potentially) your view of the world. In addition to what txmdd said, explain what impactful changes to the world you would make if you were accepted into the program. (Ex: how will your dream institute change people's lives? What is its impact on the world? Why should it exist?)

You also sound like you're just bragging about your grades (which are wonderful, ngl) and your cricket hobby. That's not really motivating at all. Change it up, focus more on the question instead of yourself, if that makes sense.

Hope it helps. Sorry if this is a bit late.

Edit: I have no idea about what the university is asking of you, but personally I think it's better if you don't send any extra unnecessary documents. For most universities, documents that are not asked for will not be considered. I doubt they'll even open your laptop award thing. (No offense tho) Double check if 1) it's allowed 2) if it matters/affects your application.
bvalkyrianzz 3 / 5  
Dec 22, 2022   #6
Please consider reading the topics that are usually left on the pages of your essay or in the contest notice. Of course, you don't understand what to write, and you're not adding any of the information that universities request. Don't give vague answers, show interest and seriousness about what the scholarship is about.
elanour65 1 / 3  
Dec 22, 2022   #7
This is not exactly a motivational letter. Although you have outlined specifically your end goal, the rest does not draw any connection to your ambition. Moreover, your primary goal of becoming a CEO of a company employing 10,000 developers can be rephrased. You can say instead that you want to establish yourself in the world of software engineering. Breakdown this end goal into achievable short term goals.

Something that is missing from this essay is the "why": why is this vision career defining for you? This needs better motivation than your grades and other hobbies. You can also scrap off your hobbies or anything not relevant to your goals. While this may be interesting to the reader, it does not serve the purpose.
itachi99 1 / 1  
Dec 26, 2022   #8
@ahad checkout other people's SOP to get an insight of how to convert your achievements and education background, relevant to your application.


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