Stipendium Hungaricum motivation letter
Could you please help me review this motivation letter? Here are the requirements:
Please write at least 1500 characters, but not more than 2500 characters.
You should explain your experiences and ideas, how you met the field of cognitive science, why you thought it would be suitable for you, what your aim is with the MSc degree, how you would imagine your career, which area you are interested in and what further studies you might plan. Besides, please, specify why you want to come to Hungary, to Budapest, to our university, to our faculty, to this programme. Please, tell us what makes you a successful candidate, what do you think, how our programme is connected to your future plans.
Please, be always specific and try to connect your own ideas and experience to what we can offer you through our programme.
Here are less than 2500 characters according to the requirements:
Dear Scholarship Committee,
Dear XX,
Vipassana is a primordial meditation method for enlightenment. It helped me overcome the pain of losing my beloved father in my second year of college. That tragic loss to a poor family like us made me wonder: continue studying or quit? With great determination, I studied and worked as a Grabike driver 25 hours a week to support myself. I also maintained my academic records to receive a scholarship every semester. I carried out two student scientific research projects, had a scientific publication, and am preparing for another publication. These things make me more mature and love knowledge more. As a result, I overcame nearly 100 classmates to become the valedictorian with the desire to devote more to science.
Having studied neurophysiology since freshman year at college, it wasn't until the last year that I realized how interesting it was in explaining the way we think. After my father's death and statistical analysis using SPSS software with a total of 574 participants, I wonder: do we perceive death and science in the right way? Without the understanding of the human brain, we could not do science effectively and vice versa. From there, I became more interested in the philosophy of science, and the YYY lab at XX. Thus, Neuroscience with a specialization in Cognitive Models of Science is the optimal way to approach the truth of science and to create a revolution in science. However, I also want to work on the neuroscience of mindfulness because experiments are also fun and valuable.
With knowledge and skills from XX, I will contribute to the development of where I graduated. The Department of Educational Psychology with subjects such as Scientific Research Methods will be my main teaching area. I will also be a research assistant, earning my Ph.D., and continue to research and teach Cognitive Neuroscience and related fields at Vietnam National University Ho Chi Minh City.
Hungary is one of the countries with the longest diplomatic relations with Vietnam. Among the most innovative countries when its capital is a treasure trove of architecture makes me excited to discover this place and its culture. I also found out that XX means knowledge, opportunity, openness,... - values that I have been pursuing. Therefore, I hope to come here and bring my experiences to contribute to an interdisciplinary field like Neuroscience.
Thanks for your consideration!Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 One aspect of this essay that needs further development would be the reference to why the university was chosen and why you wish to study in Hungary. Both aspects need you to explain how the advancements in Neuroscience, specifically, the contribution of Hungarian scientific minds, to the past, current, and future development of this field. An interest in cutting edge, innovative, and developing studies at the university would be of help as well. It would help create a related foundation for your interest in coming to Hungary and studying at the university.
Your career plans are presented in a more threshed out manner. What is your current career position? Are you working at your alma mater? Is that why you are interested in improving these specific programs at the university? Where do you see your career going after completing the masters course? Is there a promotion on the horizon for you? Please develop a clearer explanation of the value of the masters course to your profession.
