Speech on : Life and Gifts, help editing my speech

Speech on : Life and Gifts

Good morning class I'm here today to talk about life and gifts

A lot of people think that their lives are hard, but its not. Actully living a life that you probably are

right now is a gift. Why I say that? Is because if you look at all these other continents, and all

these othe cities, you would see people who starve to death, such as Africa.

Theres a thing called children slavery, where they have to work at ages as low as 5.

Your lives are not hard, and we should tend to look at our lives and be grateful for what we have.

People killed themselves each year because they think their life are so hard and falling apart, its stupid

because a lot of people think this every day "is my life hard"? "Is there a point of living anymore"?

You know the people in Africa I bet like alot of them would give their life to live ours. And alot of us would

probably want to live a better life. You know you are living the better life, they would probably like to live

a better life. And I just want to say this because if your parents are still married thats a gift, if your

grandparents are still married thats a gift. If you still have a relationship with your friends, family,

and everything else that a gift. If you look at everything in this context you should be appreciative

of the life you live and as the saying goes the best things in life are free .

can you help me to create a outline for this speech please

Can someone help me set my speech up please

1.Introduction - Establish topic and core message; list supporting points
2.Body
1.Supporting Point One
2.Supporting Point Two
3.Supporting Point Three
3.Conclusion - Recap main points; summarize core message; call-to-action

Hi! I hope you had good luck with it today. If you are still working on it, you should start with a list of ideas. An outline can really cause you to become "blocked." Just use a list. What do you mean about life and gifts?

You'll need about 800 words to cover 3 minutes.
List several points you want to make, and when the list has 6 or 7 points, ask yourself what is my main idea for the whole thing?

Whatever it is, write about it at the beginning and also the end of the speech.

One paragraph = one idea. Make it so that each paragraph begins with a topic sentence that expresses one of those 6 or 7 points. Then, use the rest of the paragraph to explain. It gets really EASY when you start thinking about it as 6 or 7 little single-paragraph essays. So, make your 6 or 7 points, and frame it between a graceful intro and conclusion.

:-)

Can you edit it for me and help me with a outline? and maybe come up with a new title.

search for: Speech on : Life and Gifts, help editing my speech. Thats my speech

Good morning class I'm here today to talk about life and gifts
(sounds a little too much like a teacher, "Good morning class, today we will talk about long division...")

A lot of people think that their lives are hard, but its life is not so hard. Actually a life to live that you probably are

right now is a gift. Why do I say that? It is because if you look at all these other continents, and all these other cities, you would see all these homeless people; you would see people who starve to death, such as those in Africa. Theres something called children slavery, where they have to work at ages as low as 5. Your lives are ...

You know, of the people in Africa, I bet 98 percent of them would give their lives up to live ours. And 98 percent of ...

Dont take this as like I'm crazy, but you know what I'm making a point here because a lot of people think that each day their lives are hard, and they are not at all.

I think you should include some statistics to help make your point. Also, you should get more specific about the kind of life that you are calling a gift. Are you taking about having needs met and having reliable work, honest work? The opportunity to living simply is something to be thankful for, even if you are not rich. I think this is similar to what you are saying.

To make your outline, just look at the points you make and list them:

I Life is a gift
a. some people are born into slavery.
b. people in poor countries would give up their lives to life ours.
c. if your parents are still married, you are lucky.

Kelvin, can you please help me get to my point please

You are making good points, and I see that you are trying very hard, but YOU have to come up with the ideas. All I can do is help with the English Grammar and with improving the presentation.

Life is indeed a gift, because we did not do anything to deserve it. However, in Buddhism it is said that in life there is suffering. So, we have gifts and we have suffering. Whenever we find some freedom from suffering, that is a gift, too.

My advice for you is like this:
The essay is too simple, because it is saying, "Appreciate what you have." Everyone knows that they should do that, but we have trouble doing it. Therefore, go speak to a person who is suffering, someone who is sick or poor or grieving the loss of a loved one. Ask that person what their advice would be for people who cannot appreciate the good things they have. Write a paragraph about your interview with a homeless person, a sick person, or a grieving person.

Then, go interview someone who helps to heal people -- a priest or counselor or social worker.

Add some discussion of these interviews to your speech, and it will be an impressive, fascinating speech.

No it's not a essay. It's a informative speech for my communication class (public speaking).