it's supposed to be maximum 150 words, i have exactly 150 words.
is this ok?
what should i delete/add?
are there unnecessary details in there?
here it is:
I held a summer job at the Main Line Chinese Cultural Center. It is a camp where american born Chinese children are given exposure to the Chinese culture and language. Therefore, since I was fluent, I was required to speak Chinese as much as possible. I held the position of head junior counselor and teaching camper. As head junior counselor, it is my responsibility to keep track of the attendance and to monitor the performance of the junior counselors, and report it to the advisor. As a teaching camper, I assisted the teacher in the arts and craft class by preparing material or helping the children. During my time at the center, I helped build a book corner and donated up to fifty children's books. I also helped organize the talent shows at the end of the season by gathering ideas from the counselors and giving them to the advisor.
is this ok?
what should i delete/add?
are there unnecessary details in there?
here it is:
I held a summer job at the Main Line Chinese Cultural Center. It is a camp where american born Chinese children are given exposure to the Chinese culture and language. Therefore, since I was fluent, I was required to speak Chinese as much as possible. I held the position of head junior counselor and teaching camper. As head junior counselor, it is my responsibility to keep track of the attendance and to monitor the performance of the junior counselors, and report it to the advisor. As a teaching camper, I assisted the teacher in the arts and craft class by preparing material or helping the children. During my time at the center, I helped build a book corner and donated up to fifty children's books. I also helped organize the talent shows at the end of the season by gathering ideas from the counselors and giving them to the advisor.
