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'Being able to see new places' - common app transfer essay



kingkung 3 / 6  
Dec 30, 2011   #1
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

Home. It is not just a four letter word about where a person lives, but it is also a place where we discover who we are. Though living at home for the past 19 years has given me a place to grow as a person, I want to encounter different parts of the world because I don't want to be confined within my set lifestyle and perspectives on life. The world is a place where there are thousands of different points of view, from what is right and wrong to what is the best food out there. Living in the same vibrant city that I was born in, I am forever grateful for the chance San Francisco gave me to encounter people with different thoughts and personalities. Still, life is about taking chances and discovering what is out there and embracing it.

By transferring, I am hoping to take a chance and discover what is out there for me. Though my whole life has been within the same city, transferring to a different college will give me a way to find out who I really am. Am I the girl who loves to eat pasta and Chinese food because that is what I know? Or instead am I the girl that wants to travel the world and see many places, from China to Mexico to Thailand? The different possibilities out there show that everyone in the world is not the same. We have different thoughts, likes and dislikes and ways of learning. Being able to see new places will give me a chance to discover that the world is not just a small place where everything is set in stone. College is a place where people learn about new ideas everyday and it is where I hope to find exactly who I am.

bommy1994 3 / 8  
Dec 30, 2011   #2
i think this essay is great! straight to the point and yet detailed!
worried26 1 / 23  
Jan 3, 2012   #3
I agree, great essay! But maybe be a little more specific about the objectives you hope to achieve? It's good that you want to gain a new perspective on life through this experience, so how will that help you in the future? What else do you hope to accomplish? Just think about that a little more!

Other than that, great essay. The words flowed together nicely as well.

Hope this helped!

Could you look at mine too? It's the UChicago essay, I would really appreciate it, thanks! :)


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