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I don't like the first sentence at all! Please help changing that and make any changes necessary elsewhere.
Prompt:Given your interests, values, and goals, explain why Oberlin College will help you grow (as a student and a person) during your undergraduate years. (300 Words)
I had to be very careful choosing a college where I would be spending my next four years. I had to made sure that I end up in a college not so big and not that small either, that has a very good community and has the option of research. I also found out I need to be in a liberal arts college because of the low student-faculty ratio. Amazingly I found out Oberlin; a place where I will be greeted wholeheartedly and will have endless opportunities to pursue my interests.
In Oberlin I can accomplish my research interests in Physics and Astronomy which will enhance my academic and scientific skills that is needed to be a successful researcher. I can also double major in Physics and Astronomy and that is a huge opportunity for me. Other than that I also have the opportunity to go to an Engineering school through the Engineering Program. I can also learn the piano and the guitar at Oberlin which has been my fascination for many years being confident that I will get the best music education from the conservatory. Other than that I can get into many clubs such as Astronomy, Coed Soccer, Cycling and Anime club. In Oberlin I can also engage myself in community service, which I have been doing for a long time here, through many programs available at the Bonner Center, I will have ample opportunity to show my leadership and volunteer skills.
At last what I can say is that at Oberlin I will not only be pursuing my intended major but also enjoying the college life through many activities available. It's the place where I will be able to thrive not only in academics but also I will be able to grow into a better human being by getting involved in the Oberlin community.
I don't like the first sentence at all! Please help changing that and make any changes necessary elsewhere.
Prompt:Given your interests, values, and goals, explain why Oberlin College will help you grow (as a student and a person) during your undergraduate years. (300 Words)
I had to be very careful choosing a college where I would be spending my next four years. I had to made sure that I end up in a college not so big and not that small either, that has a very good community and has the option of research. I also found out I need to be in a liberal arts college because of the low student-faculty ratio. Amazingly I found out Oberlin; a place where I will be greeted wholeheartedly and will have endless opportunities to pursue my interests.
In Oberlin I can accomplish my research interests in Physics and Astronomy which will enhance my academic and scientific skills that is needed to be a successful researcher. I can also double major in Physics and Astronomy and that is a huge opportunity for me. Other than that I also have the opportunity to go to an Engineering school through the Engineering Program. I can also learn the piano and the guitar at Oberlin which has been my fascination for many years being confident that I will get the best music education from the conservatory. Other than that I can get into many clubs such as Astronomy, Coed Soccer, Cycling and Anime club. In Oberlin I can also engage myself in community service, which I have been doing for a long time here, through many programs available at the Bonner Center, I will have ample opportunity to show my leadership and volunteer skills.
At last what I can say is that at Oberlin I will not only be pursuing my intended major but also enjoying the college life through many activities available. It's the place where I will be able to thrive not only in academics but also I will be able to grow into a better human being by getting involved in the Oberlin community.
