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I'm submitting this today!!! I really need help on this essay, any constructive criticism or advice on grammar is appreciated! I will help look over your essays in return.
Staring into the evening lights, I called out "Zai jian!" meaning good bye in Chinese as my tutor kid skipped towards her mom's waiting car. With a bright smile on her face, she turned around and replied, "Thank you, I love English!" Looking after my tutor kid's disappearing figure, a mixture of disbelief and happiness filled me. I was happy that my tutor kid loved English now, but I couldn't believe that the service was over. As I contemplated my thoughts, my thoughts went back to the first day of the program.
Our homeroom teacher was passing out some sort of signup sheet. Without giving the paper a glance, I threw it in the recycle bin. However I picked it up again. Looking at the crumpled paper, I saw the words Night Angel Program, in which we visit a local Taiwanese school to teach children English. I had little faith in myself for tutoring kids. Hesitant whether I should give go, my friend did her best to persuade me to go. In the end, I did go. In a flash, a car was driving me towards my destination: Jiushe Elementary School.
As the car came to a complete stop, I looked around as the coordinator of the program led us to a classroom. Upon seeing the empty room, my fear renewed and my faith in myself wavered. What if the children never listen to me? Would the kids like me? Suddenly, a high shrill was heard. The kids appeared and filed into the classroom. Then, the coordinator assigned a kid for us to work with. I ended up with a girl named Angie. Giving her a smile, I asked how her day was and asked if she liked English. As expected, she said no. Yet, I decided to give it my all to make English fun for her. Time passed, and Angie began to open up and ask questions. "How about this word?" she asked in Chinese. In response, I answered, "lollipop". Upon hearing the word, she emitted an angel's laughter; she was enjoying English. Realizing what just happened, I saw my faith in myself gradually coming back.
By the end of the first day, my fear diminished and I enjoyed talking to Angie. As my time with Angie was over for the first day, she came up to me and gave me a wide smile and big bear hug. Surprised by her sudden actions, I chuckled under my breath. Staring into those bright eyes, I saw Angie's optimism making me wanting to continue helping kids like Angie.
Because of this community service, my faith in myself and passion in helping others grew stronger. No matter if it is tutoring kids or helping the needy around the world, my passion for provide service will never cease. Keeping this notion in mind, I believe that Pepperdine is a university that can aid me to spread my contributions to the community and the world.
I'm submitting this today!!! I really need help on this essay, any constructive criticism or advice on grammar is appreciated! I will help look over your essays in return.
Staring into the evening lights, I called out "Zai jian!" meaning good bye in Chinese as my tutor kid skipped towards her mom's waiting car. With a bright smile on her face, she turned around and replied, "Thank you, I love English!" Looking after my tutor kid's disappearing figure, a mixture of disbelief and happiness filled me. I was happy that my tutor kid loved English now, but I couldn't believe that the service was over. As I contemplated my thoughts, my thoughts went back to the first day of the program.
Our homeroom teacher was passing out some sort of signup sheet. Without giving the paper a glance, I threw it in the recycle bin. However I picked it up again. Looking at the crumpled paper, I saw the words Night Angel Program, in which we visit a local Taiwanese school to teach children English. I had little faith in myself for tutoring kids. Hesitant whether I should give go, my friend did her best to persuade me to go. In the end, I did go. In a flash, a car was driving me towards my destination: Jiushe Elementary School.
As the car came to a complete stop, I looked around as the coordinator of the program led us to a classroom. Upon seeing the empty room, my fear renewed and my faith in myself wavered. What if the children never listen to me? Would the kids like me? Suddenly, a high shrill was heard. The kids appeared and filed into the classroom. Then, the coordinator assigned a kid for us to work with. I ended up with a girl named Angie. Giving her a smile, I asked how her day was and asked if she liked English. As expected, she said no. Yet, I decided to give it my all to make English fun for her. Time passed, and Angie began to open up and ask questions. "How about this word?" she asked in Chinese. In response, I answered, "lollipop". Upon hearing the word, she emitted an angel's laughter; she was enjoying English. Realizing what just happened, I saw my faith in myself gradually coming back.
By the end of the first day, my fear diminished and I enjoyed talking to Angie. As my time with Angie was over for the first day, she came up to me and gave me a wide smile and big bear hug. Surprised by her sudden actions, I chuckled under my breath. Staring into those bright eyes, I saw Angie's optimism making me wanting to continue helping kids like Angie.
Because of this community service, my faith in myself and passion in helping others grew stronger. No matter if it is tutoring kids or helping the needy around the world, my passion for provide service will never cease. Keeping this notion in mind, I believe that Pepperdine is a university that can aid me to spread my contributions to the community and the world.