Hi all. I'm stuck between these two short answers: "please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)"
I originally submitted the first one for one of my schools, but afterwards I was a bit hesitant because I thought it was cliched...so I wrote another one! Yet, I feel like the 2nd isn't as personal. Any help would be GREATLY appreciated. This is the one thing standing between me and submission (;
#1
When I became the communications head for Fashion for A Cause, I imagined glamorous networking in the name of St. Jude's Hospital. However, my daydreams were quickly trampled by my quest for food donations. I was faced with dead-end phone calls from every store and restaurant. I had always thrived on the idea that blood, sweat, and tears could produce dreams; all I wanted were refreshments for our charity fashion show. I was ready to trade in my motto when a last-minute meeting with a Cheesecake Factory owner yielded the desired results. That evening, as I juggled precariously stacked dessert boxes on my way to the show, I realized that the difference of a few cheesecakes had renewed my faith in the power of determination. The simple act of persistence had brought about the truly glamorous aspect of the job: confidence that I could create my own luck.
#2
As Communications Head of Fashion for A Cause, I have fought the misconception that students of a science and technology school are merely interested in science and technology. Although I consider myself a "geek" due to my passion for biology and psychology, I also harbor a deep love for the arts; to me, fashion is an outlet for innovation and imagination, just as science is. As an FAC liaison within the school, I both encourage students not previously interested in the arts to explore their artistic sides and recruit artistically minded students to use their talents to benefit others through creating garments and designing sets. My dedication to FAC not only stems from my desire to give back to others, but also from my desire to show students that a love of science and art complement each other and coexist through the same principles.
I originally submitted the first one for one of my schools, but afterwards I was a bit hesitant because I thought it was cliched...so I wrote another one! Yet, I feel like the 2nd isn't as personal. Any help would be GREATLY appreciated. This is the one thing standing between me and submission (;
#1
When I became the communications head for Fashion for A Cause, I imagined glamorous networking in the name of St. Jude's Hospital. However, my daydreams were quickly trampled by my quest for food donations. I was faced with dead-end phone calls from every store and restaurant. I had always thrived on the idea that blood, sweat, and tears could produce dreams; all I wanted were refreshments for our charity fashion show. I was ready to trade in my motto when a last-minute meeting with a Cheesecake Factory owner yielded the desired results. That evening, as I juggled precariously stacked dessert boxes on my way to the show, I realized that the difference of a few cheesecakes had renewed my faith in the power of determination. The simple act of persistence had brought about the truly glamorous aspect of the job: confidence that I could create my own luck.
#2
As Communications Head of Fashion for A Cause, I have fought the misconception that students of a science and technology school are merely interested in science and technology. Although I consider myself a "geek" due to my passion for biology and psychology, I also harbor a deep love for the arts; to me, fashion is an outlet for innovation and imagination, just as science is. As an FAC liaison within the school, I both encourage students not previously interested in the arts to explore their artistic sides and recruit artistically minded students to use their talents to benefit others through creating garments and designing sets. My dedication to FAC not only stems from my desire to give back to others, but also from my desire to show students that a love of science and art complement each other and coexist through the same principles.