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Short Answer: Department which appeals most to you- biological/biomedical engineering



sushilife 3 / 5  
Oct 30, 2011   #1
Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

Like every other crazy teenage kid on a Saturday night, I am, of course, at home engrossed in Watson and Crick's "Nature" article describing the helical structure of DNA. But while my eyes sparkle marveling at scientific wonders as I am alone in my room, a greater part of me aspires to apply molecular biology in a way that affects millions of people. The Biological/Biomedical Engineering department at MIT will give me the opportunity to collaboratively work with passionate students, world-class professors, and pioneering researchers to channel the magic of biology to the world at large.

Does it seem...too generic? Any suggestions?

Podolski 1 / 9  
Oct 30, 2011   #2
96 words....Thumbs Up!! Really expresses your love for the subject and that is wonderfully portrayed. However, wouldn't it be good enough if you describe one faculty in particular?

Hope you can help with mine!
kellylui 1 / 2  
Oct 30, 2011   #3
I think this is quite nice, but I think you may consider talking more about the topics that you are interested in exploring in college and give some reasons... Also perhaps you can shorten some of your expressions and the opening lines, given that a 100-word essay is really really short, and I think you could cram in more 'substance' in there... Just my personal opinion, hope it's helpful! :)


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