Dear friends,
Please help me by letting your feedbacks, your experience and even your criticism on my first essay to apply for a university in Singapore.
Many thanks,
yin.
This section is an opportunity for you to elaborate on the information you have provided earlier. You may wish to discuss a special talent, a personal experience or an activity that you have been involved in that is of relevance to the course that you are applying for at the university.
As there is only limited space (2000 characters), you are encouraged to present your ideas in focused and thoughtful manner.
I still clearly remember the lyrics of the song "What will be, will be" with peaceful melodies.
"When I was just a little girl, I asked my mother what will I be.
Will I be pretty, will I be rich.
Here's what she said to me.
Que sera, sera.
Whatever will be, will be.
The future's not ours, to see
Que sera, sera
What will be, will be"
In truth, this is my most favorite song. However, I do not believe in the fact that "the future's not ours, to see; what will be, will be". If I believed in the so called "fate", there wouldn't be my passion to make my dream of studying overseas come true like this at the moment.
The way that leads me to studying business is rather tough and incidental. Especially, when I have a determination to make my dream of becoming a successful and globally influential businesswoman come true, it turns out to be more difficult to pursue. However, nothing's impossible!
I used to think that I would become a teacher not a businesswoman. I was born in a traditional family. My parents were teachers. I was deeply impacted by their thoughts. However, I changed my mind in the end. I chose Foreign Trade University, a university major in economics. Perhaps, I had rather pragmatic thoughts at that time. My biggest dream is to travel around the globe. If I became a teacher with average salary for teachers in Vietnam, would I make my dream come true? In addition, I wanted to challenge. FTU is one of the universities whose benchmark is the highest in my nation. I was nervous when applying for FTU because I had spent my high school's years at a small town without good conditions like students from big cities. Plus, I was not sure I had talent in the field of economics. I just had a wish to change the traditional path of my family. But after one year study at FTU, now, I'm confident to say that I can go further on the way conquering economic knowledge.
During the past year, I took part in many social activities. Frankly, I used to think that my main purpose to join extra activities was to make my achievements more colorful. Now, after years doing such activities, I regret there were such vile thoughts in my mind. I joined in SIFE team of FTU to conduct projects to help the poor and disabled. As a project leader of the project solving the environmental issues in Ben Tre province, I experienced lots of precious lessons from practical life, one of which was "To be a successful businessman, at first, you must learn how to give and how to live" I can feel that deeply in my heart there is love for the citizens living in the environment seriously polluted by the smoke from coconut coal.
I want to study abroad partly due to this reason. By this way, I can get the most updated knowledge from foreign countries to help my citizens. And of all universities considered, I choose NUS because I know that NUS can give me the best environment to make my dream come true. Conquering NUS is the first step of the plan for my future. Therefore, regardless of how far the way to NUS is, I will go till the end.
Please help me by letting your feedbacks, your experience and even your criticism on my first essay to apply for a university in Singapore.
Many thanks,
yin.
This section is an opportunity for you to elaborate on the information you have provided earlier. You may wish to discuss a special talent, a personal experience or an activity that you have been involved in that is of relevance to the course that you are applying for at the university.
As there is only limited space (2000 characters), you are encouraged to present your ideas in focused and thoughtful manner.
I still clearly remember the lyrics of the song "What will be, will be" with peaceful melodies.
"When I was just a little girl, I asked my mother what will I be.
Will I be pretty, will I be rich.
Here's what she said to me.
Que sera, sera.
Whatever will be, will be.
The future's not ours, to see
Que sera, sera
What will be, will be"
In truth, this is my most favorite song. However, I do not believe in the fact that "the future's not ours, to see; what will be, will be". If I believed in the so called "fate", there wouldn't be my passion to make my dream of studying overseas come true like this at the moment.
The way that leads me to studying business is rather tough and incidental. Especially, when I have a determination to make my dream of becoming a successful and globally influential businesswoman come true, it turns out to be more difficult to pursue. However, nothing's impossible!
I used to think that I would become a teacher not a businesswoman. I was born in a traditional family. My parents were teachers. I was deeply impacted by their thoughts. However, I changed my mind in the end. I chose Foreign Trade University, a university major in economics. Perhaps, I had rather pragmatic thoughts at that time. My biggest dream is to travel around the globe. If I became a teacher with average salary for teachers in Vietnam, would I make my dream come true? In addition, I wanted to challenge. FTU is one of the universities whose benchmark is the highest in my nation. I was nervous when applying for FTU because I had spent my high school's years at a small town without good conditions like students from big cities. Plus, I was not sure I had talent in the field of economics. I just had a wish to change the traditional path of my family. But after one year study at FTU, now, I'm confident to say that I can go further on the way conquering economic knowledge.
During the past year, I took part in many social activities. Frankly, I used to think that my main purpose to join extra activities was to make my achievements more colorful. Now, after years doing such activities, I regret there were such vile thoughts in my mind. I joined in SIFE team of FTU to conduct projects to help the poor and disabled. As a project leader of the project solving the environmental issues in Ben Tre province, I experienced lots of precious lessons from practical life, one of which was "To be a successful businessman, at first, you must learn how to give and how to live" I can feel that deeply in my heart there is love for the citizens living in the environment seriously polluted by the smoke from coconut coal.
I want to study abroad partly due to this reason. By this way, I can get the most updated knowledge from foreign countries to help my citizens. And of all universities considered, I choose NUS because I know that NUS can give me the best environment to make my dream come true. Conquering NUS is the first step of the plan for my future. Therefore, regardless of how far the way to NUS is, I will go till the end.