Area of Emphasis Essay - Film

the beauty in film stories

Film is beauty captured that can be reshown. As a filmmaker, you possess the ability to create this beauty in stories that reach a vast amount of different people. You possess the power to grab their attentions in a way that is emotional and raw. I do not know of any other medium that moves people to such emotion. Film is always playing an active role in our lives. It is always affecting the way we act, and the way we see the world. I want to impact people so that they see the world differently than before. I want to become a filmmaker because I want to share stories that may be unconventional but are also important, and need to be heard.

Not sure what your prompt is but great writing regardless! Only thing I could possibly add is just to say maybe expand on what you've written. Asking questions like why these stories need to be heard can help expand essay like this.

Sabrina, what prompt are you trying to respond to? It is really difficult to review your statement since I do not know what purpose it was written for. The prompt was supposed to give that information to me. Anyway, the response that you gave is very common in information and presentation. There is nothing in your response that makes it stand out. It is not "extraordinary" in any way that would have made it memorable to the reader. Depending upon the prompt you are trying to respond to, there should have been a more definite and personalized feel to the response. At the moment, the personal feel is there on a superficial instead of deep level. I suggest that you reconsider your response to the prompt and, based upon its applicability, revise the essay to be better suited towards a personal understanding, desire, and ambition than the current response represents. Look for a more uncommon reason to want to become a film maker other than to tell the stories of other people in a format that is acceptable to most people. Your response is too mainstream. Try to respond more in the mindset of an independent filmmaker.