'art and science, programming' - Common App short writing

Hi forum,
please help me edit and make my short-writing sound better.

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

Both art and science, programming has been my creative source of satisfaction. Finding new approaches to solving problems using specialized algorithms and formal logic further disciplined me into this world of technology. This is a different universe with completely different laws governing it. Having this joy of total control over this universe and creating products piece by piece with my own hands is a reflection of God's delight while creating this world. Seeing this idea of "universal computer literacy" inspired me to teach students something new and exciting, thus leading me to create a computer science club. In addition to teaching, it provides opportunities for advanced student-programmers to test their inherited over-the-years-skills by participating in specialized competitions. In this manner, time management, discipline, patience, and a motivation of others helped me explore my leadership, and teaching skills and opened grand doors of opportunities that are yet to come. (Characters: 998, Words: 148)

Thank you,
JB

Pretty good, but has some awkward phrasings. I've quoted the ones I think you should change since I couldn't understand them or they sounded strange.

A lot of these sentences could also be reworked to combat passive voice.
Finally, using fewer pronouns will make your writing much clearer, as there are places where you don't use them effectively.


What are you trying to say here?


try, "A combination of both science and art, programming satisfies my creativity."
A net 5 character loss, enough for an adjective anywhere you want.


could be said better as, "Different laws govern the world of programming."
But what significance does that have anyways? Make it say something about you or reallocate those characters to a more useful purpose.


What idea? You talk about "this idea" but you haven't introduced it, so I have no idea which one it is.

These are the things I noticed after my second reading.

Hi!
Thanks for the input.


I was trying to say that the 'world of technology' controls my life.
Could you suggest a sentence that will do so?

JB

Finding new approaches to solving problems using specialized algorithms and formal logic further disciplined me into this world of technology.
I was trying to say that the 'world of technology' controls my life.
These two thoughts don't really match, and I still don't know why or how you would explain that a world of technology "controls" your life.

Do you mean that computers dictate your every move with an algorithm? Do you mean that you think of everything in some programming mindset?
Your original sentence uses details about programming well though.

I'm opposed to writing a sentence for you as it would be my sentence and couldn't possibly represent you correctly.

I don't want you to write me one but suggest (to get me going).
I meant that I'm surrounded with technology in my environment. Basically, everything I do is done using computers, and that I cannot imagine my 'world' without technology.

Sorry if you are still having trouble understanding what I was trying to say in my original sentence.

Are those quoted texts mine? I don't remember writing those!

I think The essay must clearly demonstrate your activity....though I understood that but stressed Admission Officers are not going to look that hard....At lest you need to clarify your activity, may it be in the beginning, in the middle or by a single word in the end.

And judging from your writing skills I get the hint that you can definitely spice the essay up!

Good luck and do help with mine!

I will make this an essay instead