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Assistant Coach - UBC short answer - an activity


emilydavis 1 / -  
Dec 2, 2018   #1
personal profile question: Tell us more about ONE or TWO activities listed above that are most important to you. Please explain the role you played and what you learned in the process.

assistant coach



There is no doubt my role as an assistant coach has allowed me to grow and develop my leadership skills and establish confidence in my abilities. Volleyball has always been my favourite sport, and so taking the chance to help others recognize the sport for all it has to offer was an easy choice. Walking into the first practice, however, was incredibly nerve-wracking as for the first time I was all on my own, far outside my comfort zone. I quickly learned, however, that I had no reason to worry as the head coaches were very welcoming and supportive. Being able to relax into the environment enabled me to concentrate on leading and motivating the team, inspiring the kids to do their best, no matter the outcome. I had no idea how much of an impact my actions could leave until I began to see the product of my effort come alive. Not only did I begin to see my confidence levels rise, but I noticed the kids were more self-assured and comfortable with themselves. The realization that I had a part to do with their increased levels of certainty lead me to become aware of and acknowledge my leadership abilities. One kid in particular especially challenged my role as a leader. He was often off task and cooperated only when he felt like it. I had to figure out a way in which I could get through to him and get him participating enthusiastically, all while helping him develop his skills as a volleyball player. I ended up presenting the game in a way that wasn't just about practical skill and focus, instead I turned the game into one where the focus wasn't on constantly trying to be perfect in terms of technique but allowed him to be creative and engage with the game on a different level. The challenges I faced while coaching tested my leadership capabilities, but they also helped me further enhance and polish these qualities. I learned what it truly means to be a leader, beyond the basic definition.

Any feedback is appreciated!

Holt [Contributor] - / 7,322 1844  
Dec 3, 2018   #2
Emma, the presentation is a bit scattered. I would divide this presentation into 2 paragraphs. The first paragraph would be an introduction to the activity while the second paragraph focuses on what I learned and skills I developed through the activity.

I would present the first paragraph in this manner:

Volleyball has always been my favourite sport...offer was an easy choice. My role as an assistant coach... confidence in my abilities. Walking into the first practice...product of my effort come alive.

The second paragraph would discuss:

I began to see my confidence ... beyond the basic definition.

The problem with the essay is not so much the content as it is the presentation. You need to separate the discussions to make the role you played and the learning process clear to the reviewer. The first half, indicates a description of your role how you portrayed it. The second, was about how you developed your leadership skills, which is part of your learning process. When clearly set out as separate paragraphs, the reviewer will be able to better scan, find important elements, and remember your application. It is difficult to track your discussion at the moment because all of the information is squished together in a single paragraph.


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