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Babson- Dear Roommate. Great friend.



Priyanka3 6 / 16  
Dec 31, 2010   #1
Hi thank you reading the essay. Any comments/ critiques will be appreciated. Thank you.

The topic was- Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him or her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson, and what you are looking forward to the most in college:


Dear future roommate,

First and foremost, I'd like to congratulate you on your new chapter of life beginning at our new home, Babson College. Many say that College is the best four years of your life where you truly discover yourself, and I personally couldn't be more overwhelmed. I know our new beginning together will be filled with surprises, let downs, and many firsts, but the journey itself will undoubtedly be unforgettable and worthwhile.

If I had to describe myself with one word, risk taker would be it. I take risks academically, personally, and in everyday matters. Yes, I realize that failure is a possibility with risks, but equally is success. With that, I fully acknowledge the fact that I'm unquestionably, a true optimist. As your roommate, I'll try my best to be your number one support system as a great listener, or just simply, a friend in need. Those nights where we feel homesick, to those days where we can't express what's wrong, I promise to be there. I hope you'll too accompany me in my adventurous and spontaneous events I partake in. A little sneak peak of my bucket list contains cliff jumping, a little different from the typical bungee jumping but don't worry, just as thrilling, and scuba diving, discovering a new type of world underwater. I'm not perfect and have both my strengths and flaws, as so do you but I look forward to growing as a person, and learning from the positive and negative experiences we encounter each day. Together, we can transform our dreams into reality.

I'm an idealist. I don't know where I'm going, but I'm surely on my way. I knew that the first step in reaching my destination was through the doors of Babson College. As I'm sure you had your own reasons, I did too and the choice was simple, and clear. In the midst of completing my college applications, I saw something in Babson that I hadn't seen in the others; heart. It's not only shown by the apparent motivation and support in the faculty and its students, but by the strong vision and core values Babson grasps. It inspires its students to be the future, and guides them in the road towards it. Babson provides a great business education with its emphasis on innovation, collaboration, and key business disciplines: all of which I strongly believe in. I'm ready to expand my borders and discover ideas and knowledge of which my mind will truly be amazed by, with you, my future friend.

We are the students of the class of 2016, slowly creating history in our own, Babson College. Are you ready? I surely am. If you're not too sure, remember, you've got a friend by your side the whole way.

Sincerely,
Your new friend.

Heavenn07 5 / 12  
Dec 31, 2010   #2
I loved this!
It is so personal and sincere.
My only comment is that the bit about transforming dreams into reality is cliche.
Other than that, kudos!
lk0124 3 / 2  
Dec 31, 2010   #3
It is very well written and I did not find any grammatical errors. The only thing I noticed is you indicated class of 2016 - Is this a 5 year program or are you currently a junior?
OP Priyanka3 6 / 16  
Dec 31, 2010   #4
Thank you. Haha I realized that after writing it, and yes it should be changed to 2015! Thanks!


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