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My Bangladeshi grandfather influenced me



nazzaman 1 / -  
Sep 2, 2012   #1
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

Things I want to talk about
- My grandfather from my fathers side
- He came to the USA by being clever and cunning, he is the pizzazz in my veins
- He was open minded and willing to incorporate himself into society which made him succeed ( he made me realize, in order to succeed you must conform )

- He was both book smart and street smart, I see him in my father

Things I can actually say:
Tausig Ali, my grandfather was born on a crisp winter morning in 1941 to a lower middle class family in Bangladesh. As soon as he was born, he instantly captivated many with his unusual green eyes. All 8 of his brothers and sisters sat on the floor welcoming him to the family that had very little to offer. My grandfather's family was living in poverty at the time they'd eat banana leaves and rice most of the nights - banana leaves are traditionally used as plates in Bangladesh. No one would be able to guess where destiny would lead my grandfather.

My grandfather passed away the week before I was born, so I never had the opportunity to meet him. But I've heard allot about him and his voyage to the United States. Tausig Ali hit the lottery for a free visa and plane ticket when he was 19 years old and was able to immigrate to the United States. He did not speak English, have a formal education and certainly didn't have enough money to spend. Yet he managed to bring success to his family.

Hi everyone, I need help with my essay as I just started it now. I can't think of any follow up questions I can ask myself after this, and I don't quiet understand the point of the Essay and I need serious help! Any way to make the essay less awkward sounding will be greatly appreciated ( I noticed I said my grandfather like 2000000x billion times )

hazel94 2 / 3  
Sep 2, 2012   #2
You have minor spelling mistakes, so make sure to use spellcheck. Other than that, build up on what you know about him! Be honest! Write about what influence he's had on YOU, on your lifestyle-that's the point of the essay.

I see a lot of places where you can replace 'my grandfather' with 'him' or 'his'. :)

Build up on how his journey influenced you, impacted you, how he managed to achieve so much starting from so little. Your grandfather sounds like a great person, and I'm sure you can write a brilliant essay based on his story!


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