So first thanks so much for looking at this I truly appreciate your help. I think that the first one needs to be shorter and I need suggestions on how to synthesize it and should I provide more detail about Barnard or are my reasons adequate. The second one my mother says it has too many cliches and I also need to whether I should work more information about myself into it or if I should work more information about the women in history into it. Again thank you so much for your help.
How did you first learn about Barnard College and what factors have influenced your decision to apply? Why do you think the College would be a good match for you?
Several members of my family have attended or taught at women's colleges. My maternal grandmother taught biology at Spelman College. My mother and her three sisters are Smith College Alumnae, and my sister is currently a sophomore at Wellesley College. Therefore, I have come of age in a family that exposed me to women's college including Barnard and also educated me on the benefits of attending them. My mother and her sisters are accomplished, compassionate, and witty women. Since becoming a Wellesley woman, my sister has become much more confident and self aware. Barnard would be great for me because it would give me an opportunity to flourish in an empowering environment that women's colleges offer their students, while still allowing me to chart my own course. In addition, at Barnard, I would expect not only to gain lasting friendships and confidence but also opportunities and experiences that are only possible in New York City.
B. Pick one woman in history or fiction to converse with for an hour and explain your choice. What would you talk about?
Juliette Gordon Low or J Glow as I like to call her, is the founder Girl Scouts in the United States and she is my hero. I have been a Girl Scouts since I was four and attended hundreds of meetings which helped form the women I am today. I would begin by very happily tell J Glow of all the wonderful things Girl Scouts have done since she founded them 101 years ago. Then I would thank J Glow for you giving me and so many other women an organization that taught us to make our own definition of beauty, reminded us that we have to duty to serve others, and most importantly showed us that the bonds of sisterhood are unbreakable.
How did you first learn about Barnard College and what factors have influenced your decision to apply? Why do you think the College would be a good match for you?
Several members of my family have attended or taught at women's colleges. My maternal grandmother taught biology at Spelman College. My mother and her three sisters are Smith College Alumnae, and my sister is currently a sophomore at Wellesley College. Therefore, I have come of age in a family that exposed me to women's college including Barnard and also educated me on the benefits of attending them. My mother and her sisters are accomplished, compassionate, and witty women. Since becoming a Wellesley woman, my sister has become much more confident and self aware. Barnard would be great for me because it would give me an opportunity to flourish in an empowering environment that women's colleges offer their students, while still allowing me to chart my own course. In addition, at Barnard, I would expect not only to gain lasting friendships and confidence but also opportunities and experiences that are only possible in New York City.
B. Pick one woman in history or fiction to converse with for an hour and explain your choice. What would you talk about?
Juliette Gordon Low or J Glow as I like to call her, is the founder Girl Scouts in the United States and she is my hero. I have been a Girl Scouts since I was four and attended hundreds of meetings which helped form the women I am today. I would begin by very happily tell J Glow of all the wonderful things Girl Scouts have done since she founded them 101 years ago. Then I would thank J Glow for you giving me and so many other women an organization that taught us to make our own definition of beauty, reminded us that we have to duty to serve others, and most importantly showed us that the bonds of sisterhood are unbreakable.