"No beach but hard work" - Georgetown: Significant summer/school activity

In the space available discuss the significance to you of the school or summer activity in which you have been most involved

heres what i wrote Im not quite sure if it falls under a summer activity. please leave feed back

For the past three years I have been employed part time. During the first summer my friends were going to the beach or the pool, while I was hard at work blending shakes and scrubbing tables at a fast food restaurant. As a 15 year old girl, I felt sad and left out since I was working hard making minimum wage and my friends were outside soaking up the summer sun. After that first summer I realized something; that I am developing traits and skills that otherwise I would not have learned. I started to appreciate having a job, not because I gained a little independence from my parents and had some extra spending money, but I gained sense of reality that most kids my age don't discover until after high school, where they a forced into a harsh environment with no job experience. Although I didn't like that job I stuck with it until I found a suitable replacement. Unpleasant situations are often very good learning opportunities is a significant outlook I took on life after the first summer of working.

Hey there :)

I think this is a really good start. In my opinion, though the general does convey a strong message, maybe you should include a specific example.

A situation for the instance, not just duties. Something that conveys what skills you posses, an example that shows how much you have learned :)

hyphens:
part-time
fast-food
year-old

Use a colon in a situation like this:
After that first summer I realized something: I am developing traits and skills that otherwise I would not have learned. ---yeah, but if you did not have to work making shakes you could have been learning how to do something more meaningful, like nutrition science or how to give cognitive therapy or acupuncture, or how to play the banjo!

So, stay on the lookout for ways to learn what you like... :-)

I like the theme of your essay, though! Can you tell a little about how this might influence the careers you choose?