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become a heart surgery doctor, My success in the future lies in my own hands.



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Jan 31, 2010   #1
I'm writing an essay for my English class,,,, I want you help me correcting and fixing my mistakes please...I need it as fast as you can guys,,,,,!! i'm waiting for your help :)

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All About Me

It took me 18 years old to create who I am today and to discover and know the world around me.

I was born in Chicago,IL in199I, but raised in Palestine.I grew up in a wonderful lovely family that contains my mother, two elder sister and three younger brothers. My father wasn't living with us, because he is busy with his job. He is a businessmen; therefore, we were seeing him twice a year. He was coming over to visit us in Palestine every single winter break and we were visiting him in summer time.That continued to happen until summer 2007.We decided to stay in the USA next to my father.Therefore I entered William Howard Taft High School as junior student and graduated after two years. Then I entered Wright College to have my Associate degree and transfer to an university. I'm planing to transfer to the University of Chicago to take my Bachelor degree in Biochemistry.

I'm a kind of person who has a big self-confident which make my life harder sometimes especially when i want to get in contact with someone and put me in a very bad situation with others because most of them misunderstood my big confidence that i grew up at .

My ambition in life is getting my high eduction and enter a medical school and become a heart surgery doctor. Therefore,I need to study as hard as i can and to be more mature.

I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot stop here. I need to move on in order to reach my goals. My success in the future lies in my own hands.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 31, 2010   #2
Salah, it's so nice of you to make al these great corrections! Check out the EF_Contributor page.

I know that the road ahead will not be easy for me, but I cannot stop here. I need to move on in order to reach my goals. My future success in the future lies in my own hands.


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