I wrote the following essay for my application to Georgia Tech, but want some feedback before I submit my application. Prompt in Bold
Why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech and what do you hope to contribute to our community?
For as long as I can remember I have dreamed of becoming successful in life. I learned early on that I had a natural affinity to computers, and thus wanted to pursue a career related to my interests. After touring earlier this year, I learned that Georgia Tech is the best suited college to better educate me in my pursuit of success. On my tour I learned Georgia tech offers much more than just a higher education, but also a strong fellowship that offers many opportunities to give back to the community. Some of the things I hope to experience most at Tech are the clubs and student associations which provide opportunity to get myself involved in life at Georgia tech. I have taken great interest in the co-op programs offered at tech because of their great opportunity to give students a chance of gaining experience in their chosen field while also doing something they love for a major company. I really hope to be sporting Georgia Tech's white and gold colors while on my journey to success.
Why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech and what do you hope to contribute to our community?
For as long as I can remember I have dreamed of becoming successful in life. I learned early on that I had a natural affinity to computers, and thus wanted to pursue a career related to my interests. After touring earlier this year, I learned that Georgia Tech is the best suited college to better educate me in my pursuit of success. On my tour I learned Georgia tech offers much more than just a higher education, but also a strong fellowship that offers many opportunities to give back to the community. Some of the things I hope to experience most at Tech are the clubs and student associations which provide opportunity to get myself involved in life at Georgia tech. I have taken great interest in the co-op programs offered at tech because of their great opportunity to give students a chance of gaining experience in their chosen field while also doing something they love for a major company. I really hope to be sporting Georgia Tech's white and gold colors while on my journey to success.