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Going to UC Davis is the right choice for me because as first generation college students, I have the goal to aim high and allowing me to accomplish my goals. I have visited UC Davis previously, I have instantly adapted it to its community. Since I come from a small community and I have always been involved in my high school clubs and extracurricular activities. UC Davis is the best college for me because it provides various programs that help students as myself. University of California, Davis is the right place to follow my undergraduates studies of Biochemistry. It offers classes that would assist me in reaching my career goals. In addition, joining clubs like MEDICOS SIG and the Academic Medicine SIG will provide me with a chance to encourage myself towards my goal. Moreover, joining sports clubs like the UC Davis Cross Country and Track club will allow me to interact with other students that share the same interests as me. I have no doubts that UC Davis is the right place in order for me to succeed. I will take advantage of any resources that are available to me.
Going to UC Davis is the right choice for me because as first generation college students, I have the goal to aim high and allowing me to accomplish my goals. I have visited UC Davis previously, I have instantly adapted it to its community. Since I come from a small community and I have always been involved in my high school clubs and extracurricular activities. UC Davis is the best college for me because it provides various programs that help students as myself. University of California, Davis is the right place to follow my undergraduates studies of Biochemistry. It offers classes that would assist me in reaching my career goals. In addition, joining clubs like MEDICOS SIG and the Academic Medicine SIG will provide me with a chance to encourage myself towards my goal. Moreover, joining sports clubs like the UC Davis Cross Country and Track club will allow me to interact with other students that share the same interests as me. I have no doubts that UC Davis is the right place in order for me to succeed. I will take advantage of any resources that are available to me.