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"Let's have bizarre celebrations," ; Common good, Bowdoin College supplement


cafelle 1 / -  
Oct 31, 2013   #1
Bowdoin students and alumni often cite world-class faculty and opportunities for intellectual engagement, the College's commitment to the Common Good, and the special quality of life on the coast of Maine as important aspects of the Bowdoin experience.

Reflecting on your own interests and experiences, please comment on one of the following
(250 words)
intelectual
1. Intellectual engagement
2. The Common Good
3. Connection to place

"Let's have bizarre celebrations," sings my friend while preparing compost. I recognize the first lines of Wraith Pinned to the Mist. "Let's pretend we don't exist..." she continues, as I keep harvesting green beans.

From picking up flowers under ninety seven degrees, to harvesting beans under heavy rain. From tilling the soil, to making compost and creating the best conditions for the plants to grow. From becoming best friends with worms and bees, to joking with farmers about the inconsistency of the weather.

Every time I planted seeds and watched growth throughout time, I felt I was creating a story, a documentary told off screen and integrated into every day's monotony.

I see farming as a book on a shelf, every plant is a character that has the purpose to feed and generate resources in its surroundings, to promote a state of wellness among consumers. Every plant is part of a story bigger than itself. Farmers are just creating the conditions to make the stars shine.

"Let's pretend we don't exist" repeats my friend one more time. In other words, let's remove our external selves, let's drop the faces we create. Let's create an eternal good. Common good can be achieved if we let our imagination go beyond simple and automatic tasks, if we start catching different glances of a world that appears to be trivial.

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I'm currently having some troubles with this prompt. I don't know what I should be addressing exactly.
Any help would be appreciated.
kaough 1 / 6  
Nov 4, 2013   #2
I must first say that I love Of Montreal
I am seeing them this month in New Orleans and I am super excited

But even with our similar taste in music put aside I really love your essay.

You should put Wraith Pinned to the Mist in quotes just to be proper
and maybe consider revising the sentence starting "Every time i planted seeds and watched growth..." to something along the lines of "watched them grow over time" just because its sort of sounds strange.

I think it would help you focus your essay onto the prompt if you talked about how farming ( in your case ) lets you see the common good in society or basically just expand more on the ideas laid out in the " Common good can be achieved if we let our imagination go beyond simple and automatic tasks, if we start catching different glances of a world that appears to be trivial. " and maybe aim those ideas at society or some sort of community since common good normally refers to some thing for the wellfare of a community or group

however you could definitely take it and put a spin on this common good idea if that would help you keep the tone you wanted

I think you did a great job of weaving together an interesting and likable essay now all you have to do is focus those ideas in on the " common good " idea

Good luck friend


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