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Topic: Write about an experience in which you encountered a tension between personal freedom and community standards. Discuss the experience and the underlying issues, how you dealt with the tension, and whether or not there was a satisfactory resolution.
In my junior school I was never in the boarding house because I was too young to be all alone by myself, but I would always see the hostel students after school wearing hostel wear and I knew from that moment that I wanted to go to a school were the hostel student were not told what to wear and were not made to look like prisoners. Then I finally got to high school and we were allowed to wear our own clothes as long as they were decent enough.
When I got to my final year we were told that were gong to be wearing hostel wear for the rest of the year and I felt I had lost all the freedom I had like I was going to become like one of those hostel students from my junior school it felt sad. I was very strong minded and I decided that I was not going to buy the hostel wear. I told my dad and he said that the school had not informed him of any changes in the hostel wear he said he was not going to pay for it. It went on for weeks, of course none of the students at school liked the idea nobody wanted to be dictated to what to wear in hostel for the rest of their school year. The principal said that we all had to wear it and their was nothing we could do about it. Most parents did not like the idea and the rest felt that it was sensible so they could stop wasting money on so many clothes for their children each year. It just happens that majority of the parents who did not like the idea of hostel wear had no time to come down to the school and protest for us the student, even my parents were not in the country. Majority of the student body protested in the school silently saying they were not going to buy it but the principal said if we did not buy the hostel wear we were going to be suspended many student decided they did not want any bad records on their resume so they bought the hostel wear. After a few week some of us got used to the idea, most of the final year students decided that they could do it since it was their last year that we could all do it that it wasn't such a bad Idea for our last year in school. The rest of the student body could not do anything if we the final year students could not. Now everyone has gotten used to the idea although if we were given the chance we would not want to wear it but what can you do we are just taking everyday as it comes and going to school hoping they will change this rule and give us back our freedom as students.
Topic: Write about an experience in which you encountered a tension between personal freedom and community standards. Discuss the experience and the underlying issues, how you dealt with the tension, and whether or not there was a satisfactory resolution.
In my junior school I was never in the boarding house because I was too young to be all alone by myself, but I would always see the hostel students after school wearing hostel wear and I knew from that moment that I wanted to go to a school were the hostel student were not told what to wear and were not made to look like prisoners. Then I finally got to high school and we were allowed to wear our own clothes as long as they were decent enough.
When I got to my final year we were told that were gong to be wearing hostel wear for the rest of the year and I felt I had lost all the freedom I had like I was going to become like one of those hostel students from my junior school it felt sad. I was very strong minded and I decided that I was not going to buy the hostel wear. I told my dad and he said that the school had not informed him of any changes in the hostel wear he said he was not going to pay for it. It went on for weeks, of course none of the students at school liked the idea nobody wanted to be dictated to what to wear in hostel for the rest of their school year. The principal said that we all had to wear it and their was nothing we could do about it. Most parents did not like the idea and the rest felt that it was sensible so they could stop wasting money on so many clothes for their children each year. It just happens that majority of the parents who did not like the idea of hostel wear had no time to come down to the school and protest for us the student, even my parents were not in the country. Majority of the student body protested in the school silently saying they were not going to buy it but the principal said if we did not buy the hostel wear we were going to be suspended many student decided they did not want any bad records on their resume so they bought the hostel wear. After a few week some of us got used to the idea, most of the final year students decided that they could do it since it was their last year that we could all do it that it wasn't such a bad Idea for our last year in school. The rest of the student body could not do anything if we the final year students could not. Now everyone has gotten used to the idea although if we were given the chance we would not want to wear it but what can you do we are just taking everyday as it comes and going to school hoping they will change this rule and give us back our freedom as students.
