List the books (if any) you've read this year for pleasure. Choose one and in a sentence describe its impact on you.
Books
The Inheritance Cycle, Two States
Impact
The protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, Eragon, closely relates to my life as a teenager, albeit in a magical world; his compassion for his comrades, the sacrifices he makes, and his fight for justice inspires me to be compassionate and just, and his growing maturity, especially towards the end of the series serves to provide valuable lessons to life.
Idk how much more to write in one sentence. I'm trying to be as genuine as possible. The series really inspired me, and had me crying when some characters died. But im really not sure how to fit in all this.
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Before I begin giving advice, I've seen other responses to this essay, and apparently they're writing a paragraph (no more than 200 words) rather than just a sentence.
Are you certain that we can only write one sentence (I'm writing the same prompt also) ?
I'm not sure... but the question says so. I did ask elsewhere and the reply was one sentence. But it wasn't a professional or someone.
Hmm... well then, I'll just go with the sentence.
The protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, Eragon, closely relates to my life as a teenager, albeit in a magical world; his compassion for his comrades, the sacrifices he makes, and his fight for justice inspires me to be compassionate and just, and his growing maturity, especially towards the end of the series serves to provide valuable lessons to life.
Here are my suggestions:
"As a teenager, I can closely relate to Eragon, the protagonist in the book The Inheritance Cycle, without all the magic. Eragon's compassion for his comrades, the sacrifices that he makes, and his continual fight for justice inspire me to ..." Besides just reiterating what you just said, find some other description, besides "compassionate and just" ..maybe your outlook on life has changed, or the way you interact with strangers.
Tacking on the "and his growing maturity..." part at the end doesn't do justice to the smoothness of your sentence, so if you want to keep that, I would suggest incorporating that as a life lesson to the description I talked about right before this ^^ (with the compassionate just part)
Keep going!
Yes, thank you. I knew it was a crude sentence. I just had to brainstorm. Here is my sentence -
As a teen, I can closely relate with Eragon, the protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, whose rise from an unknown village to a valiant Dragon Rider, inspired me to come out of my shell and have a new perspective on life, and his sacrifices and compassion towards comrades urged me to strengthen my bonds with friends and family; it moulded me into a new individual who was stronger, amiable and strived towards togetherness and peace.
Another revision, I couldn't edit the above in time.
As a teen, I can closely relate with Eragon, the protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, whose rise from an unknown village to becoming a valiant Dragon Rider, sacrifices, compassion towards comrades, and growing maturity throughout the series instilled confidence in me to take decisions, urged me to strengthen my bonds with friends and family, and inspired me to come out of my shell and have a new perspective on life; it was filled with surprises to enjoy, and on the whole, the book moulded me into an individual who was strong at heart, compassionate, and did not hesitate to voice out his opinions when necessary.
OR
As a teen, I can closely relate with Eragon, the protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, whose rise from an unknown village to becoming a valiant Dragon Rider, sacrifices, compassion towards comrades, and growing maturity throughout the series instilled confidence in me to take decisions, urged me to strengthen my bonds with friends and family, and inspired me to come out of my shell and have a new perspective on life - it was filled with surprises to enjoy; the book moulded me into an individual who was strong at heart, compassionate, and did not hesitate to voice out his opinions when necessary.
The two revisions are basically the same thing, just a small difference towards the end.
woooah. this sentence kinda just exploded.
Not that it's your fault.
You're only given a sentence, and the maximum limit is 500 words (not that you should even go near this limit), so obviously it's going to be difficult.
That being said, I think you should just relax and not over think it:) it's just a sentence. You don't need to cram in every little personal character development or lesson that you learned from this book.
Try to cut down one or two of such descriptions; that way, your sentence is easier to read, and appears less convoluted. Try again.
As a teen, I can closely relate with Eragon, the protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle, whose rise from an unknown village to becoming a valiant Dragon Rider, sacrifices, compassion towards comrades, and growing maturity throughout the series instills confidence in me to take decisions, strengthens my bonds with friends and family, and inspires me to come out of my shell and have a new perspective on life; the book created a new me, in a nutshell.
Is that better?
Yes! Now we just got to give it a few tweaks.
"whose rise from an unknown village to becoming a valiant Dragon Rider, sacrifices, compassion towards comrades, and growing maturity throughout the series instilled confidence in me to take decisions, urged me to strengthen my bonds with friends and family," The key to a smoothly written sentence is parallelism, seeing as you have a list of phrases. Take out the "rise from an unknown..." part because I don't think it has any weight to what you are saying, and it helps shorten things.
so, for example: "...the Inheritance Cycle: his selfless sacrifices, incredible compassion, and mature character development inspire me to make difficult decisions, to strengthen the precious bond between family members, and to stand strong in my beliefs, regardless if they conflict with others."
What do you think? You can always change the specific wording I chose.
That's wonderful ! It's lesser words but conveys the same meaning. I would like to retain the "coming out of my shell" part however, coz that was a major impact the book really had on me. I don't know how, but it just did.
As a teen, I can closely relate with Eragon, the protagonist of the Inheritance Cycle; his selfless sacrifices, incredible compassion, and a gradual maturity in character wake me out of my shell and inspire me to be confident in my decisions, strengthen precious familial ties, and to stand strong in my beliefs.
I guess that suits me more and sums up most of the impacts. What do you think?
You know what, if it had a great impact on you, then you should definitely keep it!
However, the way you structured it is awkward, and doesn't convey a lot of meaning to a regular reader. They might go, "What? Waking out? A shell? Is he hibernating?" And if you mean, "Poke my head out of my shell", then we'll have to stay away from that because it's cliche. But the whole "confident in my decisions" and "stand strong in my beliefs" already shows that you're coming out of your shell, don't ya think?
Soooo... That said, let's try it like this:
The more I read about Eragon in the Inheritance Cycle, the more I began to think like the protagonist ; his selfless sacrifices, incredible compassion, and a gradual maturity in character inspired me to be confident in my decisions, strengthen precious familial ties, and to stand strong in my beliefs, which were all things I struggled with before.
Yikes, I don't know how I even feel about this. I think I'm completely pooped out. What I was trying to do was to replace "As a teen, I can relate with the..." because you can essentially take that out and substitute in a sentence portion that goes into more detail.
You try!
Okay, you're right there... the rest of it conveys the same meaning and I'd avoid the cliche.
I'll go with that without the ending.
As I sifted through the Inheritance Cycle, I realized the impact the protagonist, Eragon, had on me; his selfless sacrifices, incredible compassion, and a gradual maturity in character inspired me to be confident in my decisions, to strengthen precious familial ties, and to stand strong in my beliefs.
If you like it, send that baby in!
Cheers ! Good luck !