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Be Born Every day; COMMON APP/ Person who had Significant Influence


sj1912 3 / 18 1  
Dec 26, 2012   #1
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

Be Born Every day

There are two types of people in this world: ones who plan to do one thing for their whole life and others, who plan to do multitudinous things in one life. The (word-use of/ benefit of/ correctness of) of belonging to the latter is controversial but I inevitably identify myself with the second group. Just like salt formation is an intrinsic property of halogens (yes, I like to flaunt my limited knowledge of chemistry); ambivalence is mine. When I was a young girl, I was pretty sure of my goals: I wanted to be a teacher; the authority associated with marking papers in red ink was just too overwhelming to resist. A decade has passed since then and today when my parents pose the same query-"What do you want to become?", I am at an absolute loss of words.

Everyday I wake up with a new ambition in mind: yesterday I wanted to be a bakery owner so that I could devour the cakes while sample-testing, today I want to be an unbiased journalist for the local newspaper and maybe tomorrow I would want to be a business manager, the multipurpose go-to person of a company. My perception of life and my aims alters periodically. Some of my decisions involve profound thought while others are influenced by latest trends/trending opinions. Deciding upon a career and a suitable major were nightmares to me until recently as choosing one meant loosing the other.

When in doubt, (rush to/consult) your mother, so I approached her with my dilemma. She is gifted with the supreme knowledge of the ways of the world and exceptional decision-making powers. Rather than helping me settle with a subject after discerning my dilemma, she narrated the story of her life. She had always liked Science and completed her post graduation in Botany after which she undertook extensive research-work (in it). Her propensity for research (dwindled/diminished/declined) and she decided to join the civil services. She cleared the civil services examination which required her to (thoroughly) study Humanities. But before (she could join the job/her recruitment letter came), I was born and she, a career-oriented woman, voluntarily stayed at home for the next ten years to raise me and my brother. Today she is a contented Sales Tax Officer, working in a field she would never have opted when she was getting ready for college.

Through the vivid description of her choices in life, my mother taught me that there exist no limits, unless they are self-imposed. My filling the "intended major" column could not affect who I would become. I can still be someone else each time I looked into the mirror, shocking my own reflection. If I have faith in my (likings/) and my caliber, I can easily achieve whatever I aspire (to). My mother taught me that (uncertainty/ambivalence) is (normal/natural), in fact, it is great because it means that I can be born every day, ready to convert the vigor of having an oven-fresh goal into toil for achieving it. I need to put in my best effort in whatever I'm doing (now/currently). I need to focus onmy current tasks even though I may not succeed in every intended (domain/field/area), but at least the hunger in my inner soul for novel role-plays would be satiated. And isn't that the actual target of life, to listen to your heart and to fulfill its desires?
willyfree 2 / 2 2  
Dec 26, 2012   #2
There are two types of people in this world:onesthose who plan to do one thing for their whole life and others,those who plan to do multitudinous things in one life.

(yes, I like to flaunt my limited knowledge of chemistry)

Is this part of your paper or comments to an editor? I dont suggest you flaunt your knowledge at all but if you are set on doing this then I cant stop you. I do not advise it.

When I was a young girl, I was pretty surecertain of my goals

A decade has passed since then, and today when my parents pose the same query-(eliminate hyphen) "What do you want to become?", I am at an absolute loss of words.

yesterday I wanted to be a bakery ownerso that I could devour the cakes while sample-testing,devouring samples of my confectionary creations.

tomorrow Iwouldwill want to be a business manager, the multipurpose go-to person of a companythe mighty CEO of a Fortune 500 company .

My perception of life and my aims altersfluctuates periodically

Some of my decisions involve profound thoughtwhile others are influenced by latest trends/trending opinions; however, the latest trends often lead me astray .

I cant finish it all now but I'll be back to try and work on it a bit more.
OP sj1912 3 / 18 1  
Dec 26, 2012   #3
thank you soo much!! yeah please be bak for more! :)
do i delete that line?
Just like salt formation is an intrinsic property of halogens; ambivalence is mine.
br2pi5 10 / 70  
Dec 26, 2012   #4
@willyfree could you please help me with my common app essay? It's titled 'An Unexpected Journey' thank you!

yes delete that line. it doesn't add to your essay and you already said which group you identify with and then go to explain why. so delete 'Just like salt formation is an intrinsic property of halogens (yes, I like to flaunt my limited knowledge of chemistry); ambivalence is mine.' You don't need it.

Also I would recommend you use spaces between paragraphs: it makes essays easier to read.

could you please take a moment and read my common app essay? I would really appreciate it!
MiaB 8 / 25  
Dec 27, 2012   #5
. My perception of life and my aims altersperiodically

: alter* (no s)

Apart from that and what the others already said; I think your essay is really good. Well-written; and the narration is pretty touching.

However, be careful : i've heard essays about parents are not appreciated much ...
OP sj1912 3 / 18 1  
Dec 27, 2012   #6
However, be careful : i've heard essays about parents are not appreciated much ...

ii know!! but i cudnt think of nethng elc which brought out the real me! :-|
thnk you for ur help!!


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