This is my first draft after deleting everything I wrote before and writing it differently. Due tomorrow-please help!
prompt: Please tell us more about your interest in transferring. Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? (250 word limit)
Brown University carries my top choice of major: Development Studies. Although it is one of the few top schools to offer my major, it is the only school where I would feel motivated to succeed to the highest degree by pursuing my own education. It is also the only school with campus organizations where I would feel welcome in, and differing interests and ideas to allow me to learn new perspectives.
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prompt: Please tell us more about your interest in transferring. Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? (250 word limit)
Brown University carries my top choice of major: Development Studies. Although it is one of the few top schools to offer my major, it is the only school where I would feel motivated to succeed to the highest degree by pursuing my own education. It is also the only school with campus organizations where I would feel welcome in, and differing interests and ideas to allow me to learn new perspectives.
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