Building an iconic city that resembles our culture ; Why School of Architecture？

Why School of ArchitectureïźŸ

Living in a growing metropolis, I have observed the whole development of my city, from roads to apartments, stadium to library. Modernized as my home town looks, it lacks an icon to stand out from other cities, an icon making us proud of. Therefore, the seed of a dream has been planted in my heart ï building an architecture that will be written into my city's culture.

I want to study Architecture in a highly developed metropolis, and Rice University is the best choice. I am eager to acquire knowledge comprehensively in one of the best Undergraduate Architecture program. Image I am in Houston Architecture class, going on a field trip around the city, learning the history of those blocks and buildings, photo-shooting the amazing details from my own angles. Then I ran into the studio. I start sketching out my thought and elaborate my work with the concern of environment and culture. During the seminar, we sit around, discussing how to carry historical and cultural elements with modern approach.

I am looking forward to walking in the Aechitecture department in reality one day, rather than wandering in my imagination only. School of Architecture offers so many opportunities, such as studying in other global cities and the Preceptorship program, for its students to dig their potential, to progress, and to contribute to the world. I want to be one significant part of School of Architecture, to bring my creativity into practice and to thrive.

I think your essay is really strong
You fully make the reader understand your love for architecture and you make the reader be interested in what you are writing.
Great job

Can you please check my "UPenn supplement short answer...final essay,please be harsh" or "Why UPenn essay..."

Does the University want to know how much I know about it, or how I match it?

both

As modernized as my home town looks


this seemed kinda arkward when I read it. Think "an icon to take pride in" works better


Maybe its me but this part really made me confused. lol At the first sentence I thought it was imaginary than I thought it was real when I read the next two sentences. Finally I realized it was imaginary again by the last paragraph. I'd write it like this:

Imagine me sitting in the Houston Architecture class, going on a field trip around the city, learning the history of those blocks and buildings, photo-shooting the amazing details from my own angles. Picture me running into the studio, sketching out my thought and elaborating my work with the concern of environment and culture, and afterwards, discussing how to carry historical and cultural elements with modern approach in a seminar!

Thanks a lot!

Overall, I really like your response. It's sincere and you have added your personal experiences. There are just a few things that I would change.

Living in a growing metropolis, I have observed the whole development of my city, from roads to apartments, stadium to library. As modernized as my home town looks (maybe appears), it lacks an icon to stand out from other cities, an icon making us proud of (change this last sentence to: an icon we would be proud of or of having) . Therefore, the seed of a dream has been planted in my heart - building an architecture that will be written into my city's culture.

I want to study Architecture in a highly developed metropolis, and Rice University is the best choice. I am eager to acquire knowledge comprehensively in one of the best Undergraduate Architecture program. Image (I imagined myself in) Houston Architecture class, going on a field trip around the city, learning the history of those blocks, and buildings, photo-shooting the amazing details from my own angles. Then I ran into the studio. I start sketching out my thoughts and elaborate my work with the concern of environment and culture. During the seminar, we sit around, discussing how to carry historical and cultural elements with modern approach.

I am looking forward to walking in the Aechitecture department in reality one day, rather than wandering in my imagination only. School of Architecture offers so many opportunities, such as studying in other global cities and the Preceptorship program, for its students to dig their potential, to progress, and to contribute to the world. I want to be one significant part of School of Architecture, to bring my creativity into practice and to thrive.

Hope I helped. Now please return the favor, and look over my revised Princeton supplement essay. Thanks,and good luck!