Hey guys, just wanted quick feedback on this essay, anything you have to say is welcome.
Prompt: Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.
Although I've always known I wanted to major in and have a career based on the human body, my area of interest has been very broad until recently; I was undecided on whether to become a physician, or a researcher of some kind. But approximately one year ago, I read an excellent novel called The Last Oracle by James Rollins. In the novel, the author deals with the idea of the brain's plasticity, instinct, and the incredible talents of autistic savants. Since reading that novel, I also attended the Summer Leaders' Seminar at West Point, New York; it was there that I was introduced to the Engineering Psychology field, an area of study that focuses on creating devices to augment or utilize natural human abilities and behaviors. At that point, my interest in neurobiology involved further, and I began to understand what it was that was attracting me to the science so much. What fascinates me about neuroscience is the idea of being able to tap into the limitless potential of the human mind, being able to understand the biological basis for instinct, and augmenting these natural human abilities to unprecedented levels. If I am accepted into and choose to attend Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences, I plan on using the prestigious facilities at my disposal to conduct research with the Department of Neurobiology and Behavior into the biological basis for instinct, which is my current passion. I would like to find out how exactly it is that human instincts seemingly allow for minor precognition, and then I would like to augment that natural neurological function to allow one to see even further; in short, I have a great interest in pursuing my own studies in instinct at Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences.
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But approximately one year ago, This detail is not helpful... it just detracts from the reader's experience. :-)
I read an excellent novel called The Last Oracle by James Rollins. In the novel, t The author deals with the idea of the brain's plasticity, instinct, and ...
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What fascinates me about neuroscience is the idea of being able to tap into the limitless potential of the human mind, being able to understand the biological basis for instinct, and augmenting these natural human abilities to unprecedented levels. ---Without those cliches, it is just a straightforward sentence about something awesome. BTW how do you know there is a biological basis for instinct? Instincts can come from the nonlocal being that is having a dream about a world of form. Nonphysical consciousness having a dream is just as likely as matter that becomes conscious.
... into the biological basis for instinct, which is my current passion. ---Well, you are starting from a biased, point of view, I challenge, if you are assuming instinct needs to have a biological basis. What is, as I mentioned above, the basis of biology is the non-material consciousness that dreams up a wold of form with many perspectives, many eyes!? :-)
seemingly allow for minor precognition, ---If you read Embryonic Breathing by Dr. Yang Jwing Ming, you will see his answer, which pertains to the very widespread practice of meditating on the 3rd eye chakra.
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Okay, anyway, your essay is excellent and powerful because of expressing a specific passion. Not everyone has that. You did the most important thing, and I bet this essay will be a well-received.
