Welcome to my brain. It's not too clean, so keep your arms and legs inside the synapse at all times. Here, you'll see why I always take pictures from my nerdy side. It's my best side. I accept it; I've grown accustomed to being the youngest in my math and science class. Sophomore year, I remember being awkwardly elated when the senior girl next to me in AP Calculus asked me for help. My language is filled with esoteric references and mathematical terms; the look of sheer confusion on my friend's face confirms my success. I didn't respond to question number one because it already took my answers. All six of them. I wear plaid because it reminds me of prime number tables; also, parallel lines are antisocial. They never meet. I am reading a book on Chaos Theory for an extra-curricular assignment, even though I don't have to. I've already learned it all. My Middle School project fair was an infinitely detailed investigation into fractal geometry - if you'll excuse the pun, which you may not. I don't play chess competitively, though. I consider that a step too far. Instead of using thesauri to fluff my language, I recurrently must utilize a syntactic onomasticon to disencumber and abridge my parlance postliminarily to composing a dissertation. But, as yet, I cannot say in response that I am also attending a prestigious New England university. So I guess I'm not all that nerdy after all. This essay is exactly 250 words.
this is nice and effective i like the ending.
"parallel lines are antisocial" this implies that you are also antisocial which may not be the best thing to tell a college admissions officer
also you should make the connection between being nerdy and attending a prestigious new england university clearer.
It would be nice if you could give some criticism on my college essay.
I thought this was really funny and clever. I agree about the antisocial one, and I think it is just a tad self-praising at times. I recommend showing this to adults if possible just to make sure they find it as humorous as teenagers on this site do. Help with my NYU one if you can! Thanks!
I personally like your essay. It's very different than all the ones I read. However, some of your sentences don't tie in with the others and seem random. Also I'm not sure if college administers would really like it or not like it at all. It's a pretty daring essay.
It's bold, and I get what you're doing and saying, it just doesn't flow from one sentence to another for some parts of this essay. It's really good though, almost makes me jelly.
I really like this essay. It's really clever and funny. However, I agree with the others, isn't a little too daring? Are you sure the adcoms will take this literally?
I liked it but yeah I think at times you were a little too self praising and colleges will be like... and there are random sentences that don't tie into to previous ones so if you're sure of doing this I guess just work on your transitions
This essay actually made me smile :)
I like your idea! Wow I'm impressed