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I'm a charismatic leader who loves school,BU Supplement- 3 words to describe you



medelman2010 11 / 26  
Dec 28, 2009   #1
Hey,

I am really not happy with this essay, so any edits and suggestions are very greatly appreciated!
Thanks in advance

In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU community. Characters available 4000

Often, I spend more time at school than I do at home. This is not because I dislike my home, but because I take my responsibilities to my school very seriously. As an Executive on the student council, many times I arrive before school starts to set up for events or activities. Frequently I stay at school after nightfall, planning, creating, and promoting different student initiatives. I love what I do and certainly do not regret giving back to JCHS, a school that has provided me with such amazing opportunities to develop as a person.

I would describe myself as a "leader;" it is my passion and my talent. I am "inquisitive;" I love the quest for new information and knowledge. I am "charismatic;" interacting with people is one of my greatest joys. I believe that these three aspects of my character will contribute a great deal to the BU community.

Growing up, the qualities necessary for successful leadership were always considered of the highest importance in my family. Both of my parents are involved in numerous leadership positions in our community. They taught me about the qualities of hard work, dedication, and vision. My parents embody these qualities and serve as mentors for my own leadership development. I have held many of my own leadership positions in my youth group, my school, and my gymnastics team. My leadership skills would help me contribute to the BU community. I love to be involved and would do so in the many activities BU has to offer. I will offer to take a leadership role in whatever organization I join, helping to make sure that the group reaches its full potential. I realize that leadership cannot fully be developed overnight but is a continually developing skill. I plan to continue to develop my leadership at BU - both for my own growth and as a way to positively impact the BU community.

I have been told I am charismatic. I greatly value the insights and opinions of others; drawing people together is something that I enjoy and that comes easily to me. As an elected leader at both my school and in my youth group, I have been effective in reaching out and engaging a wide variety of kids and teachers in fun activities and positive social action. I would bring this quality to BU as an open-minded person who is excited to meet everybody and eager to use my skills to make things happen.

I am inquisitive and love the academic challenge of school. Just as when I am skiing and I try to find the untouched patches of snow where no one has gone before me, I enjoy delving into new terrain when I am learning. Gaining new knowledge and information stimulates me and motivates me to learn more. I continue discussions started in class once we leave the classroom, either with fellow students or with the teacher. I would bring this thirst for knowledge to the BU classroom, providing new perspectives and deepening the level of learning.

BU presents an exciting new opportunity for me. To best capitalize on this opportunity, I would employ the characteristics of leadership, inquisitiveness, and charisma to create the best possible experience for me and those around me. If we all bring our best to the fore, I know that my class at BU will be cohesive, interesting, and exciting.

emorris 2 / 19  
Dec 28, 2009   #2
You've chosen some really great words, however this essay seems more like a list rather than an essay. I would maybe take a narrative approach to the prompt and show one word leading to the other through specific examples.
OP medelman2010 11 / 26  
Dec 28, 2009   #3
Thanks for your advice...I'm totally in agreement with you- the BU ones that I have liked most so far are the narrative ones

I'm having a college app overload problem where I seem to be out of any creativity (probably why I am wasting time on this web site instead of working on my 6 other apps...but thats another story)

Any ideas about how to make it more narrative? My words dont flow so well into each other so I think it would be hard to take one story and use it throughout

anything is appreciated!

Thanks
emorris 2 / 19  
Dec 28, 2009   #4
Maybe you could follow a chronological order. You were born a leader because your parents are leaders and they raised you on those qualities. How at a very young age, you became inquisitive because of your mother being involved in your elementary school. Your charisma developed when you started getting involved in your own activities particularly in high school and how you want to continue that in college as well.


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