I didn't notice the requirement about dream at first, so it would probably not so fit. but i hope to get HARSH critique. also i will help you in return. thx~
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Different high schools bring me opportunity for different experience, but both of them cultivate my capabilities. Though I was good at math, I ever thought it was too hard to become an actuary. However, the experience in these years confirmed my goal.
I used to study in a top-ranking high school in China. I enjoyed contests and evenings in our school, and when I actually participated in the group preparing a singing contest, I found them even more fascinating. I met difficulties when negotiating with school officers for spot and calling contestants to ensure the performances. In the last minute, I was still busily correcting the show list. Even when the contest started, I couldn't enjoy it as before because of grading job. But my every effort had rewards. The whole stadium was an ocean of cheers, and the singer on the stage was like a super star. There was nothing more wonderful than seeing the revelry, which contained my painstaking efforts, was successfully held.
In my senior year, I left China and entered an American high school, a totally different environment. After I oriented to the new circumstance, my life became much busier, but community service cured my inner restlessness. Sitting near the door of school library, I checked out books and devices as an assistant. Sometimes when there was no tutor, I got a "part-time" job to tutor students in math. I enjoyed the smiles when people took books from me; I liked the nods when students understood my solutions. In the harmonious atmosphere of the library, I felt inner peace and pride, the pleasure brought by contribution.
Maturing in high schools, I strengthened my determination and gradually removed the barrier on my way. I could be an organizer, and a contributor, like the role an actuary acts when giving analysis and advice to a program or a company. Like catalysts, my experiences in high school accelerated the progress to my goal.
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Different high schools bring me opportunity for different experience, but both of them cultivate my capabilities. Though I was good at math, I ever thought it was too hard to become an actuary. However, the experience in these years confirmed my goal.
I used to study in a top-ranking high school in China. I enjoyed contests and evenings in our school, and when I actually participated in the group preparing a singing contest, I found them even more fascinating. I met difficulties when negotiating with school officers for spot and calling contestants to ensure the performances. In the last minute, I was still busily correcting the show list. Even when the contest started, I couldn't enjoy it as before because of grading job. But my every effort had rewards. The whole stadium was an ocean of cheers, and the singer on the stage was like a super star. There was nothing more wonderful than seeing the revelry, which contained my painstaking efforts, was successfully held.
In my senior year, I left China and entered an American high school, a totally different environment. After I oriented to the new circumstance, my life became much busier, but community service cured my inner restlessness. Sitting near the door of school library, I checked out books and devices as an assistant. Sometimes when there was no tutor, I got a "part-time" job to tutor students in math. I enjoyed the smiles when people took books from me; I liked the nods when students understood my solutions. In the harmonious atmosphere of the library, I felt inner peace and pride, the pleasure brought by contribution.
Maturing in high schools, I strengthened my determination and gradually removed the barrier on my way. I could be an organizer, and a contributor, like the role an actuary acts when giving analysis and advice to a program or a company. Like catalysts, my experiences in high school accelerated the progress to my goal.
